电子书— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (động từ và cấu trúc), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và rút gọn để tự nhiên hơn; tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi danh-động từ (e.g., “keen on” cần có dạng chính xác trong ngữ cảnh). Nên dùng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về tiện ích.

示例: I prefer e-books because they are more convenient and often cheaper than paper books. For example, I can download a book instantly on my phone when I need it, which saves time and space.

建议: Sửa lỗi từ ghép và trật tự từ, dùng cụm từ tự nhiên hơn (e.g., “after a hard working day” → “after a hard day at school”). Giữ câu ngắn, nêu rõ thời điểm và tần suất rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể.

示例: I usually read online in my spare time, particularly in the evenings after a long day at school. I often visit free websites or blogs about study tips and short stories.

建议: Giảm lặp ý và sửa ngữ pháp tương lai; tránh cụm từ sáo rỗng như “due to the fact”. Nên nêu lý do cụ thể và dùng cấu trúc đơn giản, rõ ràng.

示例: Yes, I think I will read more online because internet access will become faster and more widespread, making it easier to find books and articles instantly.

建议: Cần rõ ràng và sửa nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng sai (e.g., “self books”, “upbreak”, “complete my wounds” không phù hợp). Nên xác định thể loại cụ thể (self-help, novels, news) và giải thích vì sao với ví dụ minh họa ngắn gọn. Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu đúng ngữ pháp.

示例: I mainly enjoy reading self-help books online because they help me stay motivated and improve my study habits. For example, I recently read an article about time management that helped me organise my revision schedule.

建议: Sửa từ vựng sai nghiêm trọng và dùng từ phù hợp (e.g., “electronic bulbs”, “mortgage paper” đều sai). Nên so sánh rõ ràng hai phương thức theo các tiêu chí như tiện lợi, giá cả, cảm giác đọc và khả năng truy cập; dùng 2-3 câu ngắn gọn, có liên từ để mạch lạc.

示例: In my view, reading online is more convenient and often cheaper than reading paper books because you can carry many titles on one device and download them instantly. However, paper books feel better to hold and are easier on the eyes for long reading sessions.

× I would definitely say that I really keen on reading ebooks.

✓ I would definitely say that I am really keen on reading e-books.

The sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' before the adjective 'keen'. Use 'am' + adjective for the present state: 'I am keen on reading'. Also use a hyphen in 'e-books' and remove the redundant 'really' or keep one. Suggested: 'I am really keen on reading e-books.'

× This is due to the fact that electronic books is really convenient and cheaper for readers.

✓ This is due to the fact that electronic books are really convenient and cheaper for readers.

The subject 'electronic books' is plural, so the verb must be 'are' not 'is'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: plural subject takes plural verb form.

× Moreover, we can pick up it everywhere we go.

✓ Moreover, we can pick it up everywhere we go.

The phrasal verb 'pick up' separates the verb and object: with a pronoun object, the pronoun must come between the verb and particle: 'pick it up'. Placing 'up' before the pronoun is incorrect.

× To be honest, I regularly spend my spare time reading online in many free websites, especially after a hard working day at school.

✓ To be honest, I regularly spend my spare time reading online on many free websites, especially after a hard-working day at school.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'websites'. 'Hard-working day' should be hyphenated and better as 'a hard day' or 'a hard-working day' if describing the person; here 'a hard day' is more natural. Also 'reading online on many free websites' matches present habit.

× Yes, I would definitely read more online in the future.

✓ Yes, I will definitely read more online in the future.

When predicting future actions, use 'will' rather than 'would' (conditional). 'Would' suggests hypothetical; 'will' expresses a future intention.

× This is due to the fact that technology will continue to promote and improve more powerfully in the future, and the Internet access will become more faster and more widespread.

✓ This is due to the fact that technology will continue to improve and become more powerful in the future, and Internet access will become faster and more widespread.

Use 'improve' as the verb; 'promote' is wrong here. 'Become more powerful' is the correct collocation. Do not use 'more faster' (double comparative); use 'faster'. Also 'Internet access' does not need 'the' in general statements.

× Actually when I read electronic books, my old time kinds of book, I find out is self books.

✓ Actually, when I read electronic books, the kind I used to read in the past, I find books about self-improvement.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. Rephrase for clarity: 'the kind I used to read in the past' explains 'old time kinds of book'. 'I find out is self books' is incorrect; likely meant 'I find books about self-improvement'.

× This is probably because I find it's upbreak, my motivation to study and my mood to complete my wounds.

✓ This is probably because I find it helps increase my motivation to study and improves my mood to complete my work.

Many incorrect words: 'upbreak' is wrong; use 'helps increase' or 'boosts'. 'Complete my wounds' is nonsensical; likely intended 'complete my work' or 'tasks'. Use verbs and nouns that convey meaning correctly and maintain parallel structure.

× From my point of view, electronic bulbs is more convenient and cheaper than mortgage paper mortgaging.

✓ From my point of view, electronic books are more convenient and cheaper than paper books.

Subject 'electronic books' is plural so use 'are'. 'Electronic bulbs' and 'mortgage paper mortgaging' are incorrect word choices; replace with 'electronic books' and 'paper books' for contrast.

× This is due to the fact that now it was really common and popular with public.

✓ This is due to the fact that now it is really common and popular with the public.

Tense mismatch: use present 'is' for a current state ('now it is'). Add definite article 'the' before 'public'.