分享— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 答えは主題に直接答えていますが、発音の繰り返し（"they they"）、不自然な途切れ（"because it helped me make"）と文の未完了が見られます。具体例や結果を一文で加え、語彙の幅を少し増やすと良いです。リンク語（for example, because, so）を明確に使い、文を5文以内に収めてください。発音を滑らかにするために無意味な間（Uh）は控えましょう。

示例: Yes, they did. My parents taught me to share from an early age, encouraging me to offer toys and snacks to other children. For example, sharing snacks at playgroup helped me make friends quickly. As a result, I learned to be considerate and comfortable around others.

建议: 内容は具体的で適切ですが、繰り返し（"I like having fun"）と文の区切りが不自然です。より自然な接続詞（for example, so, because）を使い、一つの文で明確に理由と結果を示してください。語彙を少し多様化（e.g. fries, snacks, treats）すると良いです。

示例: I usually like to share food. For example, if I buy a large portion of fries, I often give some to my friends because sharing makes the meal more enjoyable and helps us bond.

建议: 言いたいことは伝わりますが、語彙ミス（"rending"→"lending"や"sharing"の使い分け）と文法の誤り、句読点の不足で意味が取りにくいです。理由と結果を明確にし、例を簡潔に述べてください。より自然なフレーズ（"I would avoid lending money"）を使いましょう。

示例: I would avoid lending money to friends. For example, if someone borrows money and cannot repay it, it can damage the relationship and cause awkwardness between you.

建议: 良い具体例ですが、情報の提示が断片的で時制や主語の一致（"We"の大文字や"they gave"など）が不自然です。会話の流れを示す接続詞（then, after that）や理由（why you shared）を加えると自然です。話す長さは短めにまとめてください。

示例: Yes, I recently shared my feelings with a friend about some problems at work. We talked for about an hour, and they offered useful advice that helped me feel calmer and more confident.

建议: 回答は明確で自然ですが、繰り返し（"my mother"）がやや多いです。理由と感情を短くまとめ、接続詞（because, so）を適切に使うとさらに良くなります。語彙を一語程度変えるだけで洗練されます。

示例: I would share good news with my mother first because she is very supportive and always cheers me up. I want to make her happy because she has always encouraged me.

建议: 内容は具体的で分かりやすいですが、語句の自然さ（"recent event"→"recent news"や"share the new car"→"tell them about buying a new car"）を改善すると良いです。理由（why you share）や頻度を一文で加えると完成度が上がります。

示例: I usually share recent news with my friends, especially exciting events. For example, if I buy a new car, I immediately tell them about the purchase and share my excitement so we can celebrate together.

× Yes they did, and they taught me to share from an early age. Uh. So they they encouraged me to share toys and snacks because it helped me make.

✓ Yes, they did, and they taught me to share from an early age. They encouraged me to share toys and snacks because it helped me make friends.

The final clause 'helped me make' is incomplete and omits the noun 'friends'. Use simple past 'helped' is correct because the question asks about childhood; add the noun to complete the idea. Also remove the duplicated 'they'. Suggestion: keep past tense verbs consistent and complete the object after 'make'. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× I like sharing food for example, when I buy a large portion of French fry, I tend to share them with others because I like having fun I like having fun with others

✓ I like sharing food. For example, when I buy a large portion of French fries, I tend to share them with others because I enjoy having fun with others.

Use the plural 'French fries' for a portion and separate sentences for clarity. 'I like having fun' is repetitive; use 'enjoy having fun' to vary vocabulary. The gerund 'sharing' is fine; improve word choice and punctuation. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× I believe rending money is best not to share for example a friend borrows money and cannot repay it that causes damage relationship

✓ I believe lending money is not something you should do casually. For example, if a friend borrows money and cannot repay it, that can damage the relationship.

Multiple issues: 'rending' is a misspelling of 'lending'. Word order and article usage were incorrect ('is best not to share' is awkward). Use conditional structure and add articles: 'the relationship' or 'a relationship'. Break into two sentences and use 'can' to indicate possibility. Suggestion: check spelling and use clear sentence structure with appropriate articles. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× Yes, I shared my feelings with my friend recently. It was about my workplace and We talked about one hour then they gave me some advice it was very suitable.

✓ Yes, I shared my feelings with my friend recently. It was about my workplace, and we talked for about an hour. Then they gave me some advice that was very helpful.

Use 'we' lowercase. Say 'talked for about an hour' to express duration correctly. 'It was very suitable' is unnatural; use 'helpful' to describe advice. Maintain past tense consistently. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'for' with time duration and choose appropriate adjectives. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× I'd like to share good news with my mother first because my mother is supportive and always cheers me up so I want to make her happy with my good news.

✓ I'd like to share good news with my mother first because she is supportive and always cheers me up, so I want to make her happy with my news.

Pronoun repetition 'my mother' can be replaced by 'she' for naturalness. The present tense 'is' and 'always cheers' are correct because this is a general characteristic. Simplify 'my good news' to 'my news'. Suggestion: use pronouns to avoid repetition and keep present tense for habitual traits. Note: Explanation in English as requested.

× I usually share my recent event with my friend. For example, if I buy a new car, I immediately share the new car and my excitement.

✓ I usually share recent events with my friends. For example, if I buy a new car, I immediately share the news and my excitement.

Use plural 'events' and 'friends' when speaking generally. 'Share the new car' is odd; you 'share news' about it. Use 'the news' or 'news' to refer to the information. Suggestion: use plural forms for general habits and correct collocations like 'share news'. Note: Explanation in English as requested.