分享— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, phát âm một số từ và làm câu trả lời rõ ràng, tự nhiên hơn. Hãy dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ: "too young cousin", "share my grades and press call") và giữ độ dài hợp lý. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về hành động cha mẹ làm và kết quả để tăng tính thuyết phục.

示例: Yes. My parents encouraged me to share from a young age. For example, they often reminded me to give toys to my younger cousin and made us take turns playing with popular games, which taught me patience and fairness. Because of that, I still try to be generous with others today.

建议: Câu trả lời tương đối rõ ràng nhưng có thể tự nhiên hơn bằng cách dùng liên từ và từ vựng phù hợp. Hãy nêu trước chủ đề, sau đó giải thích lý do và kết thúc bằng ví dụ cụ thể — tránh lặp từ như "share" nhiều lần.

示例: I usually share food, photos and helpful information. These things are easy to give and can cheer people up or be useful. For instance, I often bring snacks to share with colleagues at work, and I post travel photos to recommend good places to friends online.

建议: Nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không chính xác khiến ý khó hiểu (ví dụ: "birthday information", "open the text", "deep afford", "online banking basketball"). Cần viết lại câu rõ ràng, sử dụng từ vựng chính xác về bí mật cá nhân và lý do tại sao không nên chia sẻ. Giữ cấu trúc: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ cụ thể.

示例: I think personal and sensitive information should not be shared, such as passwords, bank details, or private documents, because sharing them can cause financial loss or identity theft. For example, I never give anyone my online banking password and I keep important documents locked at home.

建议: Cần chỉnh thì (thời) và một số từ vựng (ví dụ: "missed a lesser", "touch up"). Nên sử dụng thì quá khứ hoàn chỉnh khi mô tả sự kiện đã xảy ra và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về nội dung chia sẻ để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

示例: Yes, recently I shared my study notes with a friend who missed a lecture. I sent her my summaries and explained the key points, such as the main theories and important examples. It also helped me revise and understand the topic better.

建议: Ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng cần chỉnh ngữ pháp (thì và động từ), và làm ví dụ tự nhiên hơn. Thêm chi tiết cảm xúc để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn. Tránh lỗi như "she cook" hoặc "praise me" ở thì không phù hợp.

示例: I would tell my mother first because she is very supportive and always celebrates my achievements. For example, when I passed an important exam last year, she cooked a special meal and praised my hard work, which made me feel proud and loved.

建议: Câu trả lời hợp lý nhưng có vài lỗi nhỏ (ví dụ: "I should usually", "I said an article"). Hãy dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ cụ thể, và dùng động từ phù hợp khi nói về việc chia sẻ tin tức. Có thể nêu thêm các kênh chia sẻ (chat, social media).

示例: I usually share entertainment news and interesting articles with my friends because they are fun to discuss and keep us updated on new songs or films. For example, I sent an article about a newly released movie to my group chat last weekend and we discussed whether to watch it.

× They often reminded me to give toys too young cousin.

✓ They often reminded me to give toys to my younger cousin.

The sentence uses past tense correctly but is missing the preposition 'to' and the adjective form 'younger' for age comparison. Add 'to' before the indirect object and use 'younger' (comparative adjective) to describe the cousin.

× And sometimes they make me wait my turn.

✓ And sometimes they made me wait my turn.

The rest of the sentence describes past habits ('taught me', 'reminded me'), so the clause should also be in the past tense. Change 'make' to 'made' to maintain consistent past tense.

× So I learned patience and sharing.

✓ So I learned patience and how to share.

'Sharing' as a noun is grammatical but sounds awkward here. Use the phrase 'how to share' to clearly express the skill learned. This improves clarity and parallelism with 'learned patience'.

× For example, I used to share my grades and press call and I still try to be generous now.

✓ For example, I used to share my snacks and small gifts, and I still try to be generous now.

Original words 'grades' and 'press call' are incorrect or unclear in context. Likely intended 'snacks' or 'gifts'. Replace with appropriate nouns and add conjunction punctuation for clarity. Maintain simple past 'used to' for habit and present 'still try' for current behavior.

× Well, I usually share food, photos and useful information with others because they are easy to give and they make people happy or help them.

✓ Well, I usually share food, photos, and useful information with others because they are easy to give and they make people happy or help them.

This sentence is generally correct; added a comma in a list for clarity (Oxford comma). Tense and verb forms are appropriate.

× For example, I often share snacks with friends at work and post travel photos on social media to show good places.

✓ For example, I often share snacks with friends at work and post travel photos on social media to show interesting places.

Tense is fine. 'Good places' is odd; 'interesting places' is more natural. No tense change needed.

× Yeah, I think birthday information like passwords open the text should not be shared because they can lead to deep afford.

✓ Yeah, I think personal information like passwords or private messages should not be shared because they can lead to serious problems.

Original has incorrect nouns and phrases: 'birthday information' and 'open the text' are wrong in context, and 'deep afford' is meaningless. Replace with 'personal information', 'private messages', and 'serious problems' for clear meaning.

× For example, I never tell my online banking basketball to anyone and they keep important documents.

✓ For example, I never tell my online banking password to anyone, and I keep important documents locked.

Several words are wrong: 'basketball' should be 'password'; verb subjects mismatch ('they keep important documents'). Correct subject 'I' and add 'locked' to describe how documents are kept. Maintain present simple for general habits.

× Well yes. I share some study notes with my friend recently.

✓ Well yes. I shared some study notes with my friend recently.

The adverb 'recently' requires a past tense verb when referring to a completed action. Change 'share' (present) to 'shared' (past simple).

× I did this because she missed a lesser and needed the materials.

✓ I did this because she missed a lesson and needed the materials.

'Lesser' is a wrong word; likely 'lesson' fits context. Past tense 'did' is fine; correct the noun.

× So I sent her my notes and explained the main points.

✓ So I sent her my notes and explained the main points.

This sentence is correct as written. Past tense is consistent and structure is clear.

× It helped me understand the topic and touch up.

✓ It helped me understand the topic and review it.

'Touch up' is not the correct phrasal verb here. Use 'review it' or 'brush up on it' to convey studying again. Maintain past tense 'helped'.

× Well, I could tell my mother first.

✓ Well, I would tell my mother first.

Context asks 'Who is the first person you would like to share good news with?' Using 'would' expresses preference/hypothetical. 'Could' implies ability rather than preference.

× She is very supportive and she always calls me to celebrate when I have good news, so I know she would be happy for me.

✓ She is very supportive and she always calls me to celebrate when I have good news, so I know she would be happy for me.

This sentence is correct and matches present and conditional contexts. No change needed.

× For example, when I passed an important exam last year, she cook a nice meal and praise me.

✓ For example, when I passed an important exam last year, she cooked a nice meal and praised me.

Events are in the past, so verbs should be past tense. Change 'cook' to 'cooked' and 'praise' to 'praised'.

× Well, I should usually share entertainment news and interesting articles.

✓ Well, I usually share entertainment news and interesting articles.

'Should usually' is awkward—'should' implies obligation and conflicts with 'usually' habit. Use 'usually' alone to describe habitual action.

× I share them because they are fun to talk about and everyone likes to know about new songs or movies.

✓ I share them because they are fun to talk about and everyone likes to know about new songs or movies.

Sentence is acceptable in present simple for habitual action. No change needed.

× For example, I said an article about new film released to my friends last weekend.

✓ For example, I sent an article about a newly released film to my friends last weekend.

'Said an article' is incorrect — use 'sent an article'. Add 'a' before 'new film' and use 'newly released' or 'a newly released film' for natural phrasing. Past tense 'sent' matches 'last weekend'.