分享— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your response clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect pronouns. Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' correctly.

示例: Yes. My parents taught me to share when I was a child because they wanted me to be generous. For example, they explained that sharing helps others and is rewarded in our faith, and my teachers also reinforced this at school.

建议: Be specific and avoid filler words. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'help someone' not 'help her to someone') and give a clear reason. Limit to 2–4 sentences and use linking words such as 'for example' or 'because'.

示例: I usually share books, stationery and sometimes money with others. For example, I lend books to classmates and give small amounts of money to friends in need because I believe helping others is rewarding.

建议: Answer directly and provide clear examples with brief justification. Correct sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'because' to connect idea and explanation.

示例: Personal items are usually not suitable for sharing because they affect hygiene and security. For example, I would avoid sharing underwear, shoes, or expensive items such as mobile phones and watches.

建议: Keep the answer concise and chronological: state what you shared, with whom, and why. Use correct tenses and articles. Remove repetitive phrases and use linking word 'because' for reason.

示例: Yes. Recently I lent a dress to my sister because she needed something appropriate for a seminar. She asked me for it, so I gave her one of my dresses for the event.

建议: State your main idea clearly and give one specific reason. Avoid repetition and awkward phrases. Use linking words like 'because' and keep it to two sentences.

示例: I would first share good news with my parents because they have always supported me and care sincerely about my life. I trust their advice, so they are the first people I tell.

建议: Be precise: say what types of news you share and give a clear recent example. Use correct pronouns and tense, and avoid mentioning irrelevant platform details unless necessary. Use linking words like 'for example' to introduce the instance.

示例: I usually share practical news with my friends, such as job opportunities or events. For example, I recently told a friend about a job seminar I saw online because several of them had just finished their studies and were looking for work.

× Yes my parents teach me to share her the things when I was at the child's because parents always teach me and they tell me about the benefits.

✓ Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child because they always taught me and told me about the benefits.

The speaker refers to a past time ('when I was a child'), so past tense verbs are required. 'teach' and 'tell' should be 'taught' and 'told'. Also 'the child's' is incorrect; use 'a child'. Remove 'her the things' as it is ungrammatical and unnecessary.

× If you are sharing the things then Allah gives you a reward and and teachers also teach me these type of the things.

✓ If you share things, then Allah gives you a reward, and teachers also taught me these kinds of things.

Pronoun and verb forms are mixed with tense. 'If you are sharing the things' is awkward; use simple present 'If you share things' for general truth. 'Teachers also teach me' should match past teaching: 'teachers also taught me'. 'These type of the things' should be 'these kinds of things'.

× Well, I share the different kind of the things like books, stationery and sometimes money, uh, because I believe that if I help her to someone, then it's, uh, reward me to good.

✓ Well, I share different kinds of things, like books, stationery and sometimes money, because I believe that if I help someone, it will reward me.

Use plural 'different kinds of things'. 'Help her to someone' is incorrect pronoun and structure; use 'help someone'. 'It's, uh, reward me to good' is ungrammatical; use 'it will reward me' or 'I will be rewarded'.

× Most of the time I share my clothes with my friend because my friend and, uh, like to my clothes and.

✓ Most of the time I share my clothes with my friend because my friend likes my clothes.

Subject-verb agreement: 'friend' third-person singular needs 'likes'. Remove redundant and incomplete fragments at end. Use 'likes my clothes' instead of 'like to my clothes'.

× I think so that your personal things are not suitable for sharing.

✓ I think that personal things are not suitable for sharing.

'Your personal things' is acceptable but inconsistent in perspective; better to generalize 'personal things'. 'I think so that' is incorrect; use 'I think that'.

× For example your clothes and your shoes and sometime of big items like expensive items like mobile phones and watches.

✓ For example, your clothes and shoes, and sometimes large or expensive items, like mobile phones and watches.

Use commas and correct article/word forms: 'sometime of big items' is incorrect; use 'sometimes large items' or 'sometimes expensive items'. Remove repetition 'like expensive items like'.

× This is not good for you if you are sharing to someone.

✓ This is not good for you if you share with someone.

Use 'share with someone' not 'share to someone'. Also use simple present 'share' for general statements.

× Yes I have a one thing which I shared recently I shared my clothes with my sister because she need and she she want go to the other seminar and she said to me that if you share the your clothes like it is type of event.

✓ Yes, I shared one thing recently: I shared my clothes with my sister because she needed them. She wanted to go to a seminar and told me that sharing my clothes would suit that kind of event.

Use past tense 'needed' and proper articles: 'a one thing' is incorrect; use 'one thing' or 'a thing'. Fix pronoun 'them' for clothes. Rephrase 'she want go to the other seminar' to 'she wanted to go to a seminar'. Clarify 'the your clothes' to 'my clothes'.

× So I recently shared my cloth.

✓ So I recently shared my clothes.

Use plural 'clothes' not 'cloth'. 'Recently shared' is correct past tense; just correct the noun form.

× Well, the first person in my life where I share the good news with that my parents, because I believe that parents in this world have a sincere, sincere thing.

✓ Well, the first people I share good news with are my parents, because I believe parents are sincere.

Use 'people' or 'person' consistently; here 'parents' is plural so use 'are'. 'Where I share' is wrong; use 'I share'. Remove redundant 'sincere, sincere thing' and simplify to 'are sincere'.

× I think so that so I I would prefer always if I have the good news then I share with my parents.

✓ I would always prefer to share good news with my parents.

Simplify sentence structure: remove redundant fillers 'I think so that so I I' and use infinitive 'prefer to share' with correct word order.

× Well, I shared the different type of the news with my parents.

✓ Well, I share different types of news with my friends.

Question asked about friends, but sentence mentions parents; adjust to 'friends'. Use present simple 'I share' for habitual action and plural 'types of news'.

× For example, recently I shared the news with my friend that is the job seminar and my friends are recently complete their study and they have they just want to go to their job.

✓ For example, recently I shared news about a job seminar with my friend because my friends recently completed their studies and they want to find jobs.

Use past tense 'completed' and correct infinitive 'want to find jobs'. Reorder sentence for clarity: 'shared news about a job seminar' is clearer than 'shared the news that is the job seminar'.

× So I see on the Tiktok and I share with the.

✓ So I saw it on TikTok and shared it with them.

Use past tense 'saw' for a completed action. 'TikTok' capitalization and 'it' as object. 'Share with the' is incomplete; use 'shared it with them'.