分享— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答が不明瞭で文法ミスが多く、意味の伝達が不十分です。まずは主題文で「はい、教えられました」と明確に答え、その後で理由を短く具体的に述べる練習をしてください。接続語（for example, because）を使って論理を整え、単語は簡潔で関連性の高い語（e.g. share stationery, build trust）を選んでください。発音・語順の基本（subject-verb-object）にも注意を払って、1〜3文で完結させましょう。

示例: Yes, they did. My parents taught me to share because it helps build trust and friendship. For example, I often lent pencils and tools to classmates when we worked together.

建议: 内容は良いが構成が乱れていて文が途切れています。まず簡潔な主題文で共有する「もの」（knowledge）を示し、次に具体例と理由を一つか二つに絞って説明してください。接続詞（for example, such as, so）を使って文をつなぎ、不要な語は省いて5文以内に収めましょう。

示例: I usually share knowledge with others. For example, when someone starts a business I teach them how to write professional emails and how to communicate with contractors, which helps them avoid misunderstandings.

建议: 主張が曖昧で意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に対して直接的に答え（"Money is not suitable to share"）を述べ、理由を1〜2点だけ簡潔に示してください。比喩や不要な語は避け、具体的な語彙（e.g. money, personal information, passwords）を使って明確に伝える練習をしてください。

示例: I think money and personal financial information are not suitable to share. Sharing money can cause misunderstandings or damage relationships, so it's better to keep finances private.

建议: 伝えたいことは分かるが表現が混乱しています。まず何を共有しているか（food/dishes）を明確にし、その後で理由や効果（we enjoy different tastes, it strengthens our bond）を1〜2文で述べてください。不要なフレーズや文法ミスを避け、語順に注意して短くまとめましょう。

示例: Yes. Recently I often share meals with my wife. We enjoy tasting different dishes together, which makes meals more enjoyable and helps us connect.

建议: 答えの方向性は良いが文章が長くまとまっておらず語順の誤りがあります。まず主題文で「家族」と明確に答え、次に誰か（parents）と具体的な例（school admission or job success）を挙げ、最後に短い理由を付け加えてください。接続詞（because, such as）と正しい時制を使うことを意識しましょう。

示例: I would first share good news with my family, especially my parents. For example, I would tell them if I was accepted to a school or got a promotion because they always support and celebrate my achievements.

建议: 意味は伝えたいが文が不完全で曖昧です。まず主題文で「友人にはどんなニュースを共有するか」を明確に答え（e.g. personal successes, relationship news），続いて具体例と理由を一つ述べてください。不要な語を省き、cohesive devices（for example, also）で文をつなぎましょう。

示例: I usually share personal good news with my friends, such as job promotions or relationship updates. For example, if a friend starts a new relationship or achieves something at work, I happily share and celebrate that with our group.

× Yes they did, my parents told me that sharing things or not she's my friends is meaningful to enhance some strengths in the relationship each other.

✓ Yes, they did. My parents told me that sharing things with my friends is meaningful because it strengthens our relationships.

The original sentence has sentence structure and pronoun errors: 'or not she's my friends' is ungrammatical and 'enhance some strengths in the relationship each other' is awkward. Correct by splitting into two sentences, using the correct preposition 'with', using 'friends' (plural) and the verb 'strengthens' to express the idea. Suggestion: keep subjects and verbs clear, avoid inserting fragments, and use simple connectors like 'because' to show reason.

× I for example, renting tools pencils is very useful, it helps.

✓ For example, renting tools or pencils is very useful; it helps.

The original mixes verb forms and nouns incorrectly: 'I for example, renting' is a fragment and lacks a main verb. Correct by starting with 'For example' and using nouns connected by 'or'. Use punctuation to join related ideas. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a subject and finite verb or is a correct noun phrase.

× Current trip I often share knowledge when I start when someone starts businesses or conversations with the newcomers, the new contractors, how to I often teach how to send e-mail and how to have a conversation it's very.

✓ On current trips, I often share knowledge when someone starts a business or when newcomers or new contractors have conversations; for example, I teach them how to write e-mails and how to have conversations.

The original sentence has many fragments, incorrect word order, and missing articles: 'Current trip I often...' and 'how to I often teach how to send e-mail' are ungrammatical. Fix by providing a clear time phrase 'On current trips', parallel structures ('when someone starts a business' and 'when newcomers...'), and complete verb phrases. Suggestion: break long thoughts into clauses, use articles ('a business') and parallel verb forms.

× What kind of things are not suitable for sharing?

✓ What kinds of things are not suitable for sharing?

The original question sentence 'What kind of things' is acceptable in some dialects but 'What kinds of things' is more natural when asking about categories. This is an article/quantifier nuance. Suggestion: use plural 'kinds' when expecting multiple categories.

× Especially money is not so hard sharing with others.

✓ Especially, money is not so hard to share with others.

The phrase 'not so hard sharing' mixes an adjective and gerund incorrectly. Use the infinitive 'to share' after 'hard' to express difficulty. Suggestion: after adjectives like 'hard' use 'to' + verb.

× Money is the OR something like Bollywood is the jury literally so if the relationship will come up.

✓ Money or similar issues can become a serious problem and may affect a relationship.

The original is incoherent and contains unrelated words ('Bollywood', 'jury', 'literally'). Interpret intent: money can cause problems in relationships. Rephrase clearly using modal 'may' to show possibility. Suggestion: avoid inserting unrelated nouns and use clear connectors.

× Yes I do. I often share the dishes with my wife, the Sherry and some devotions.

✓ Yes, I do. I often share dishes with my wife, such as sherry and some devotional items.

Original has article and noun confusion: 'the dishes' suggests specific plates; 'the Sherry' capitalized and 'devotions' is unclear. Use plural 'dishes' or 'food' and lowercase 'sherry' for the drink; 'devotional items' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: choose precise nouns and correct capitalization.

× Can you call food with my wife I can't taste.

✓ When I share food with my wife, I can't taste it alone.

Original sentence fragments and incorrect phrasing ('Can you call food with my wife') are unclear. Rephrase to express that sharing food changes the experience of tasting alone. Suggestion: use clear subordinate clauses ('When I...') and appropriate verbs.

× Double taste and I can enjoy the.

✓ I can enjoy the food twice as I taste it with her.

The fragment 'Double taste and I can enjoy the.' is ungrammatical and missing objects. Clarify meaning by saying sharing enhances enjoyment and implies experiencing flavors together. Suggestion: complete the clause with subject, verb, and object.

× I like to share the good news with my family my father and mother are really looking forward to hear my good news such as entering the school or succeed in my job I want It has been long time since I left my home, but when I.

✓ I like to share good news with my family; my parents are always eager to hear it, whether it's about entering school or succeeding at my job. It has been a long time since I left home.

The original is a run-on with missing connectors and incorrect verb forms ('looking forward to hear' should be 'looking forward to hearing'). Split into sentences, use 'parents' or 'my parents', correct gerund after 'look forward to', and use proper past participle 'succeeding'. Suggestion: avoid run-on sentences and use correct verb patterns after expressions like 'look forward to'.

× I want to share the good news of others with my friends. When it comes to telling other successes or the love affairs, the relationship with my friends will and honestly.

✓ I like to share others' good news with my friends. When it comes to telling about others' successes or love affairs, I am honest with my friends.

Original has possessive and sentence completion errors: 'the good news of others' should be 'others' good news'. The second sentence is incomplete and unclear. Complete it by stating the speaker's behavior ('I am honest with my friends'). Suggestion: use possessive form for 'others' and ensure sentences have a subject and predicate.