新闻— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your response more direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and concise supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like "it may cost us our future upbringing." Be specific about what changed your interest (for example, political controversies) and limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I wasn't very interested in the news before, but recently I have become more attentive because of several controversial political issues. Therefore, I try to follow news updates regularly to understand how these changes could affect our future.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence and combine the supporting details with linking words. Correct tense and avoid repetition ("watch or replay their news for today"). Give a short reason why you prefer evening news to show specificity.

示例: I usually get my news on my phone, mainly from one reliable website. I prefer watching the evening news because it summarizes the day's main stories in one program.

建议: Give a direct answer first, then briefly explain with specific reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., "it requires a lot of skills"), and avoid unfinished sentences. Limit to 2–3 concise sentences with linking words like "because" or "so".

示例: No, I wouldn't like to be a journalist because the job requires strong communication and writing skills in English, which I am still improving. It also demands constant updates and quick deadlines, which don't suit me.

建议: Answer directly and use correct tense ("I haven't read"), avoid awkward phrasing ("that undergone a repair"). Be specific about when you will catch up and use linking words like "because" and "so." Keep to 1–2 sentences.

示例: No, I haven't read the news this morning because I was busy cleaning my house after weekend repairs. I plan to watch the evening news tonight to catch up.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to give reasons. Correct small errors ("each other" singular/plural) and be slightly more specific about the topics you discuss to show depth. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

示例: No, we don't usually discuss the news; we mostly catch up on each other's lives because we don't see one another often. When we do talk about current events, it's usually only about big stories that directly affect us.

× Before I am not interested in news, but nowadays because there's a controversial topic or issues regarding our politics.

✓ I was not interested in the news before, but nowadays I am because there are controversial topics and issues regarding our politics.

The original mixes present and past incorrectly. Use past simple 'I was not interested' for a past state, and present simple 'I am' for the current state. Also use plural 'topics' with 'there are' to match plural noun. Suggestion: state past vs present clearly and match verb number with the noun.

× So as much as possible I want to be updated that it may cost us our future upbringing.

✓ So I try to stay as updated as possible because these issues may affect our future.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'Want to be updated that' is not natural English. Use 'stay as updated as possible' and clarify the result with 'may affect our future.' This corrects structure and word choice.

× I usually watch news on my phone.

✓ I usually watch the news on my phone.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'news' when referring to news in general or a specific broadcast. This fits present habitual tense: 'I usually watch the news.'

× I will just look at a certain website and watch or replay their news for today.

✓ I usually go to a certain website and watch or replay today's news.

The original used 'will' unnecessarily; habitual actions use present simple. Also 'their news for today' is awkward; 'today's news' is natural. Use present simple for routines.

× Especially the Evening News because they collate the news within the day.

✓ Especially the evening news, because they collate the day's news.

Use lowercase 'evening news' and express 'the day's news' rather than 'within the day.' Maintain present simple for habitual fact: 'they collate.'

× Maybe not, I am not interested in journalism and it requires you a lot of skills like communication skill, writing skills especially in English language and I am not that excellent in that topic and you should be updated every time and.

✓ Maybe not. I am not interested in journalism; it requires a lot of skills, like communication and writing skills, especially in English, and I am not very strong in those areas. You also need to be updated all the time.

Multiple problems: sentence run-on and awkward modal/necessity phrasing. 'Requires you a lot of skills' is incorrect; use 'requires a lot of skills.' 'English language' should be 'English.' 'Not that excellent in that topic' is informal; use 'not very strong in those areas.' Use 'need to be updated all the time' for habitual necessity.

× I have not read any news today because I was busy cleaning the house that undergone a repair this weekend, but I definitely watch it tomorrow.

✓ I have not read any news today because I was busy cleaning the house, which underwent repairs this weekend, but I will definitely watch it tomorrow.

Use 'which underwent repairs' for the past participle (undergone is incorrect here). Also 'watch it tomorrow' should be future 'will watch' for a planned action. Maintain present perfect for 'have not read any news today.'

× Replay the news this day tomorrow.

✓ I will replay the news tomorrow.

The original is ungrammatical. Use a clear future construction: 'I will replay the news tomorrow.'

× My friends and I don't usually talk about the news, we just talk random things like updates on our lives because we don't see each others that often and we particularly talk about our personal lives.

✓ My friends and I don't usually talk about the news; we just talk about random things, like updates on our lives, because we don't see each other that often and we mainly discuss our personal lives.

Fix punctuation and word order. Use 'talk about random things.' 'Each others' is incorrect; use 'each other.' 'Particularly' is awkward here; 'mainly' or 'mainly discuss' is clearer. Maintain present habitual tense.