自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with tense and redundancies. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense (you are describing childhood), avoid unnecessary details like “two wheels,” and add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small black bicycle, and I rode it almost every day with my neighbor after school. As a result, I became quite confident riding on quiet streets.

建议: Give a concise direct answer, avoid filler words (uh, like), and organize reasons using linking words. Provide specific examples or brief comparisons to support your view. Keep responses coherent and under five sentences.

示例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Firstly, most people prefer public transport such as the Skytrain or subway because it is faster. Secondly, heavy traffic and pollution make cycling less safe and less appealing for daily commuting.

× Yes, I do have one. It is a black bike with two wheels and I used to ride it daily when I was a child with my neighbor.

✓ Yes, I had one. It was a black bike with two wheels, and I used to ride it daily with my neighbor when I was a child.

The student is speaking about the past (having a bike as a child) so present simple 'do have' and 'is' are incorrect. Change to past tense 'had' and 'was' to match the time frame. Also move the time phrase 'when I was a child' to the end for clearer word order. Suggestion: keep verbs consistent in past when describing past situations.

× For me, I would say not really because people usually use uh, Skytrain or subway or maybe car taxi instead of bicycle because there's a lot of air pollution and also it is dangerous for like biking on the road.

✓ For me, I would say not really, because people usually use the Skytrain, the subway, or taxis instead of bicycles, because there is a lot of air pollution and it is also dangerous to ride a bike on the road.

Multiple issues: articles are needed before 'Skytrain' and 'subway' when referring to specific systems, and plural forms should be used ('taxis', 'bicycles'). 'There's' is acceptable but changed to 'there is' with plural noun 'air pollution' stays singular; keep 'a lot of' with uncountable noun. 'It is dangerous for like biking on the road' is informal and ungrammatical: use the infinitive 'to ride a bike' or 'to bike' and remove filler 'like'. Suggestions: use correct articles, plural nouns for general statements, avoid filler words, and use infinitive after 'dangerous' (dangerous to do something).