自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with verb tenses and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using correct past tense and linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep to under five sentences. For example, say when you learned, how you felt, and where you rode the bike, using past simple and connectors like “after” or “then.”

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it when I was seven, and after a few weeks I could ride confidently. Then I used my bike to visit friends and ride around the neighborhood almost every day.

建议: Use correct tense and plural forms and organize ideas with linking words (e.g., “in the past,” “however,” “nowadays”). Give one clear comparison between past and present and a brief reason. Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, bicycles were very popular in my country about 20–30 years ago; many people rode them to work or school. However, nowadays more people use the subway or drive their own cars because public transport has improved and incomes have risen.

× I start to learn how to write a bike when I was seven years old.

✓ I started to learn how to ride a bike when I was seven years old.

The sentence uses present tense 'start' but the context is past. Use past tense 'started'. Also 'write a bike' is incorrect verb choice; 'ride a bike' is correct. Suggestion: use 'started' and 'ride' for past learning of cycling.

× After I can ride a bike, I have my own bike and I ride it to many place near my.

✓ After I could ride a bike, I had my own bike and I rode it to many places near me.

The clause describes a past sequence, so modal/verb forms must be past: 'can' -> 'could', 'have' -> 'had', 'ride' -> 'rode'. 'Place' should be plural 'places' and 'near my' is ungrammatical; use 'near me'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and correct pronoun and plural form.

× I have my own bike and I ride it to many place near my.

✓ I had my own bike and I rode it to many places near me.

The noun 'place' should be plural 'places' because 'many' requires a plural noun. Also pronoun 'my' is incorrect here; use object pronoun 'me'. Suggestion: use 'many places' and 'near me'.

× Yes, bike was very popular in my country like 20 years ago.

✓ Yes, bikes were very popular in my country about 20 years ago.

Use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. The verb should be past plural 'were' to agree with plural subject (subject-verb agreement). 'Like 20 years ago' is informal; use 'about 20 years ago'. Suggestion: use 'bikes were' and 'about'.

× Many people go to went to work or study by bike like 20 and 30 years ago.

✓ Many people went to work or study by bike 20 or 30 years ago.

Mixing present 'go' and past 'went' is incorrect; use past 'went' for past time reference. Also phrasing 'like 20 and 30 years ago' is awkward; use '20 or 30 years ago'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense 'went' and clearer time expression.

× But nowadays more and more people take subway or have their own cars to.

✓ But nowadays more and more people take the subway or have their own cars.

When talking about current habits use present tense 'take' and 'have' are fine; remove trailing 'to' which is unnecessary. Include definite article 'the' with 'subway' when referring to the system. Suggestion: say 'take the subway' and omit 'to'.