自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Correct the grammar and make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief specific detail. Use correct verb forms (e.g., “I had” or “Yes, I did”) and avoid redundant words. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was three years old. It was a small red tricycle that I loved riding around our garden. Unfortunately, a friend accidentally broke it when we were playing together, which made me very upset at the time.

建议: Improve subject-verb agreement and use clearer linking words. Begin with a direct statement, then give one or two specific reasons with linking phrases (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “as a result”). Avoid vague phrases like “back when COVID happened” — be concise and precise.

示例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, during the COVID-19 pandemic many people took up cycling to exercise and avoid crowded public transport, so bike sales and cycling clubs increased significantly.

× Yes I did had a bike when I was three years old but unfortunately a friend of mine broke it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was three years old, but unfortunately a friend of mine broke it.

The auxiliary 'did' is incorrectly used with the past simple 'had'. In simple past affirmative sentences, use the past form of the verb without 'did' (did + base verb is for negatives/questions). Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'I had' for affirmative past statements and reserve 'did' for questions or negatives (e.g., 'Did you have...?' or 'I did not have...').

× Yes, bikes here in our country is very popular, especially back when COVID happened, a lot of people went to healthy living and they started riding bikes.

✓ Yes, bikes here in our country are very popular, especially during COVID, when a lot of people turned to healthier living and started riding bikes.

The subject 'bikes' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'back when COVID happened' is awkward; use 'during COVID' or 'when COVID happened'. 'Went to healthy living' is incorrect collocation; use 'turned to healthier living' or 'adopted healthier lifestyles'. Maintain consistent past tense 'turned'/'started'. Suggestion: Match plural subjects with plural verbs and use natural collocations like 'turned to healthier living' or 'adopted healthier lifestyles'.