自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Focus on correct tense and sentence structure, reduce hesitation and redundancy, and organize the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by concise supporting details. Use past simple consistently (e.g., "I had" instead of "I have"), avoid filler sounds ("uh, umm"), and link your ideas with a short connector (e.g., "but" or "so"). Keep it to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

示例: I had a bicycle when I was seven; my father gave it to me as a birthday present. A while later I had an accident while riding, so after that my father didn’t let me have a bike again.

建议: Make a clear, direct statement and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement and article use) and avoid repeating words. Provide one or two concrete examples or reasons (e.g., commuting, exercise, events) to make your answer more specific.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and exercise. For example, weekend cycling events and dedicated bike lanes in cities encourage more people to cycle regularly.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child, when I was seven years old, my father give me a, a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. When I was seven years old, my father gave me a bike.

The student used present tense 'have' and base form 'give' while describing past events. Use past simple 'had' and 'gave' to match the past time reference 'when I was a child' and 'when I was seven years old.' Suggestion: use past simple for completed actions in the past and ensure verb forms match (subject + past verb).

× Uh, that is uh, he's a birthday gift for me.

✓ Uh, that was his birthday gift to me.

The original mixes contractions and articles incorrectly and uses present tense 'is' for a past event. Use past 'was' and correct possessive 'his' rather than 'he's' (he is). Also use 'gift to me' rather than 'for me' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: avoid contractions that change meaning and match tense to context.

× And after that, umm, because of that bike, I make an accident and my father never give me a bike anymore after the accident I've been through.

✓ After that, because of that bike, I had an accident and my father never gave me another bike after the accident I went through.

The sentence describes past events but uses present tense 'make' and 'give.' Replace with past simple 'had' and 'gave.' Also use 'had an accident' (idiomatic), 'another bike' for 'a bike anymore,' and 'went through' is appropriate for experiencing the accident. Suggestion: consistently use past tense for sequences of past events and choose idiomatic collocations (have/had an accident).

× Yes, of course it is a bike was one of the sports in our country and it's it's really nice because aside from that biking is like an exercise also.

✓ Yes, of course. Biking was one of the sports in our country, and it's really nice because, apart from that, biking is like exercise.

The original mixes 'it is' and 'was' incorrectly and has redundant 'it's it's.' Use 'Biking was' as the subject to match 'was one of the sports.' 'Biking is like exercise' is more natural than 'like an exercise also.' Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and avoid redundant words; use gerund 'biking' as the subject for the sport/activity.

× So yes, that is a very popular on our country.

✓ So yes, that is very popular in our country.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect with 'country.' Use 'in our country.' Also remove the unnecessary article 'a' before 'very popular.' Suggestion: learn common preposition collocations like 'popular in a country' and omit extraneous articles.