自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は明確で論点も整理されていますが、より自然で流暢にするためには文の繋ぎ（linking words）や短い合図表現を用い、過去の経験に関する具体例や短い感情表現を加えると良いです。例えば「so」「therefore」「for example」などを使い、最後に一文で現在の状況や学んだことを付け加えると会話が豊かになります。発音や文法は概ね良好ですが、冗長な言い回し（“for two main reasons”を繰り返して長く説明するなど）を避け、5文以内に収める練習をしてください。

示例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents wouldn't allow me to ride one because the roads were very busy and they feared it would be unsafe. They also thought repairing a bike would be too costly for our family. As a result, I never learned to cycle. I wish I had learned earlier because I enjoy outdoor activities now.

建议: 内容が伝わりにくく、文法や語彙の使い方に不明瞭な部分があります。まず問いに直接答えるトピック文を明確にしてから、理由を2つ程度に絞り、接続詞（for example, however, because）で論理をつなぎましょう。また、具体的な事例（例：自転車専用レーンの不足、駐輪場の問題、通勤での利用率）を一つか二つ挙げると説得力が増します。語彙はシンプルで構わないので正確に使ってください。5文以内にまとめ、意味が曖昧なフレーズ（“The past three decades are narrow”など）は避けてください。

示例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in Japan. One reason is that many cities lack dedicated bike lanes, which makes cycling unsafe. Also, public transport is efficient and widely used, so people prefer trains and buses for commuting. For example, commuters often rely on packed trains rather than bikes, especially in big cities.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

Sentence is already correct; past simple is appropriate to describe a past state. No change needed.

× My parents wouldn't allow me to ride one for two main reasons.

✓ My parents didn't allow me to ride one for two main reasons.

Using 'wouldn't' can imply habitual refusal in the past but here simple past 'didn't allow' is clearer and more natural when explaining past rules or restrictions. Use 'wouldn't' when emphasizing repeated refusal or unwillingness; otherwise use past simple.

× First, they thought the roads were too busy and it would be unsafe for a young child.

✓ First, they thought the roads were too busy and that it would be unsafe for a young child.

Add 'that' to introduce the subordinate clause for clarity. The original is understandable but adding 'that' makes the sentence grammatically smoother and clearer in formal speech.

× Second, they believed that maintaining a bicycle would be too expensive for our family.

✓ Second, they believed that maintaining a bicycle would be too expensive for our family.

Sentence is correct; 'maintaining' (gerund) appropriately follows 'believed that'. No change needed.

× Because of this, I grew up not learning to cycle.

✓ Because of this, I grew up without learning to cycle.

Use 'grew up without doing' to express lacking an experience during upbringing. 'Grew up not learning' is awkward; replace with 'grew up without learning' for natural expression.

× No, I don't think bikes are very popular in Japan.

✓ No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in Japan.

Sentence is grammatically correct. Optionally replace 'bikes' with 'bicycles' for formality. Present simple 'don't think' correctly expresses current opinion.

× The past three decades are narrow, which makes cycling secondary, followed by commerce, public train, sports and taxis.

✓ Over the past three decades, space has been limited, which has made cycling secondary to commerce, trains, sports and taxis.

Original has incorrect metaphor 'are narrow' and unclear structure. Use 'Over the past three decades' for time reference; 'space has been limited' clarifies meaning; 'secondary to' correctly compares priorities; 'public train' should be 'trains' or 'public transport'. The sentence has multiple issues: tense, word choice, and comparison structure.

× Larger budget are difficult.

✓ Larger budgets are difficult to secure.

Subject-verb agreement error and vague phrasing. 'Budget' should be plural 'budgets' to match 'are'. Also add an infinitive 'to secure' to complete the idea: budgets are difficult to secure/obtain.

× For example, in the city there are few dedicated bike lanes and many.

✓ For example, in cities there are few dedicated bike lanes.

Original ends with 'and many' which is incomplete. Use plural 'cities' for general statement and remove the unfinished phrase. If contrasting, specify 'and many streets are shared with cars' or similar. Ensure sentences are complete and clear.