自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify and simplify your answer, use correct tense and grammar, and give one or two specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then explain why using past tense and linking words. For example, say you didn’t have a bike, explain parental reason, and add a short consequence or feeling.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents didn’t allow me to ride because they were worried I might fall and get hurt. As a result, I usually walked or took the bus to school, so I didn’t practice riding until I was older.

建议: Make your opinion clear and use coherent linking phrases. Use present simple for general facts, and provide one specific reason and an example. Correct word order and pronouns, and keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people of all ages use bicycles because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, students often cycle to school and adults use bikes to run errands in crowded city areas.

× To be honest, I have know why when I'm child because my parents don't allow me to use bike and childhood time.

✓ To be honest, I don't know why; when I was a child my parents didn't allow me to use a bike.

The sentence has multiple problems: incorrect verb form ('have know' should be 'don't know'), wrong tense for childhood ('I'm child' should be 'I was a child'), incorrect negation tense agreement with parents ('don't allow' should be 'didn't allow'), and missing article before 'bike'. These fall under incorrect use of pronouns and tense issues but per the allowed list we correct pronoun and related forms. Suggestion: use past tense consistently when referring to childhood, use 'don't know' or 'didn't know' appropriately, and include articles ('a bike'). Use punctuation to separate ideas.

× In addition, my parents felt scared when I ride the bike that's why.

✓ In addition, my parents felt scared when I rode the bike; that's why.

The sentence mixes past feelings ('felt scared') with present tense 'ride'. When describing past events use the past tense 'rode'. Also add punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense when recounting past events.

× In this modern era, bikes are most popular in my country because older individuals not only but also young children use bike in this country.

✓ In this modern era, bikes are very popular in my country because not only older people but also young children use bikes here.

Problems include awkward comparative phrasing and wrong word order ('not only but also' placed incorrectly), incorrect noun forms ('individuals' is OK but 'people' is more natural), and missing plural/article for 'bike' -> 'bikes'. Also 'most popular' is unnatural without comparison; 'very popular' fits context. Suggestion: use 'not only A but also B' with correct order, use plural 'bikes' when generalizing, and choose natural collocations ('older people', 'here').

× They can easily go anywhere you with the use of.

✓ They can easily go anywhere by using them.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and an unclear pronoun reference ('you with the use of' is ungrammatical). Replace with 'by using them' or 'by using bikes' to clearly indicate means. Suggestion: express means with 'by' + gerund ('by using') and ensure the object ('them' or 'bikes') is present.