自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one specific supporting detail. Remove filler words (uh, umm) and correct vocabulary (say "training wheels" not "support fields"). Use one linking word if needed.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I usually shared it with my brother, who is three years older than me, and I rode it with training wheels because I couldn't balance well at first.

建议: Answer directly then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Reduce hesitation words and use clearer linking words (e.g., "however", "because"). Be concise and use precise vocabulary like "infrastructure" instead of "constructed to support".

示例: I'm not sure about the whole country, but in my city cycling is fairly common. For example, groups of people cycle early in the morning, but bike use is limited by poor infrastructure, such as a lack of bike lanes, so many people only cycle for short, practical trips.

× I think I could only use it with umm, support fields on both sides, umm, since I had struggled to balance myself.

✓ I think I could only use it with umm, support wheels on both sides, umm, since I struggled to balance myself.

The phrase 'support fields' is incorrect vocabulary; 'support wheels' (training wheels) is appropriate. Also 'had struggled' (past perfect) is unnecessary because the simple past 'struggled' correctly matches the time frame 'when I was a child'. Use the -ed past form 'struggled' rather than past perfect here. Note: This suggestion follows the 'Verb + -ing form' category because the original contains awkward verb form usage and incorrect noun choice; the corrected sentence uses the simple past verb form consistent with the narrative timeline.

× I'm not sure about my entire country, but in the city that I live in, some people do bike early in the morning, uh, in large groups.

✓ I'm not sure about my entire country, but in the city where I live, some people ride bikes early in the morning, often in large groups.

Use 'where I live' instead of 'that I live in' for smoother English and avoid ending with a preposition unnecessarily. 'Do bike' is awkward; the normal expression is 'ride bikes' or 'cycle'. Replacing 'uh' with a pause indicator is optional; here we remove filler. 'Often' clarifies frequency and connects to 'in large groups'. This fits present simple tense for habitual actions.

× But our city isn't constructed uh, to support pedestrians and bike users, but some people use it for practical purposes.

✓ But our city isn't constructed to support pedestrians and cyclists, although some people use bikes for practical purposes.

Use 'cyclists' instead of 'bike users' for natural English. 'Isn't constructed to support' is acceptable but smoother with 'isn't built to support'. Avoid repeating 'but' in the same sentence; use 'although' for contrast. Also 'use it for practical purposes' is vague—'use bikes for practical purposes' clarifies the object.