自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct at the start, avoid unclear phrases and irrelevant detail, and keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g. tense, articles) and avoid unclear expressions like “M2 Sports”.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I was more interested in the arts — I learned piano and spent a lot of time sketching. However, I’ve been thinking of buying a bike recently because I want to exercise more and travel short distances without using a car.

建议: Start with a clear opinion, use linking words for coherence, and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid filler words like “umm”. Mention a concrete example or statistic if possible.

示例: I don’t think cycling is very popular in my country. For example, most people prefer buses and cars because urban infrastructure is not bike-friendly, and there are few dedicated bike lanes. Consequently, bike shops are uncommon and cycling remains a niche activity.

× Since I was an M2 Sports I didn't have a bike.

✓ When I was in M2 Sports, I didn't have a bike.

The original sentence uses 'Since' incorrectly to refer to a past time period; 'When' is appropriate for describing a time in the past. Also 'in M2 Sports' clarifies the period or context. Suggestion: use 'when' for specific past time references and include preposition 'in' to indicate participation or class.

× I wasn't much of A artsy kid instead and did a lot of things connected to art such as playing the piano, doing sketches and stuff.

✓ I wasn't much of an artsy kid; instead, I did a lot of things related to art, such as playing the piano and making sketches.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound ('artsy'), not 'A'. 'Much of an artsy kid' is a fixed expression meaning 'not really an artsy kid.' Also replace 'connected to' with 'related to' for naturalness, use a semicolon or separate clauses with a comma and conjunction, and avoid 'and stuff' in formal speech. 'Doing sketches' can be more naturally 'making sketches'.

× But no, I never ever had a bike before but I'm trying to get one these days.

✓ But no, I never had a bike before, and I'm trying to get one these days.

Using 'never ever had' is informal and redundant; 'never had' is sufficient. Also connect clauses with 'and' rather than a repeated 'but'. The combination 'never had ... before' is acceptable, and present continuous 'I'm trying' correctly indicates current effort. Suggestion: simplify to 'I never had a bike before' for clarity.

× Well, unlike European countries, I don't think that in my country cycling is popular, so due to that bikes are not popular as well.

✓ Well, unlike in European countries, I don't think cycling is popular in my country, so bikes are not popular either.

'Unlike European countries' should be 'unlike in European countries' or 'unlike European countries' followed by a noun phrase; better: 'unlike in European countries'. Word order 'cycling is popular in my country' is more natural than 'in my country cycling is popular'. Use 'either' or 'too' instead of 'as well' after a negative. 'Due to that' is awkward; omit it or use 'because of that' when needed.

× Umm, the most popular transportation vehicles would be buses, cars and all.

✓ Umm, the most popular means of transportation are buses and cars.

'Transportation vehicles' is wordy and unnatural; 'means of transportation' or simply 'transportation' is better. Use plural 'are' for listing. Remove 'and all' which is informal and vague. 'Would be' implies conditionality; simple present 'are' suits a general fact.

× And in general I don't even think that there is many shops that sells even bikes.

✓ And in general I don't even think that there are many shops that sell bikes.

'There is' should be 'there are' to agree with plural 'shops' (subject-verb agreement). 'That sells' should be 'that sell' to match plural 'shops'. Remove redundant 'even' or place it appropriately: 'sell even bikes' is awkward; keep it simple: 'sell bikes.'