自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more coherent and correct grammar: use consistent pronouns, remove fillers, and give a clear topic sentence followed by a specific detail. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and use linking words (e.g., “so,” “but,” “because”) to connect ideas. For example, correct the pronoun (the bike is not 'he'), and clarify who rode it and what you did with it, adding a brief specific memory to enrich the answer.

示例: I didn’t have my own bike as a child, but my sister and I shared one. We often rode it across town with friends, so we spent many afternoons exploring our neighborhood. Because it was shared, we took turns and learned to be patient while waiting for our turn.

建议: Improve accuracy and fluency: avoid repetition and unfinished phrases, use linking words to list reasons, and give a specific example or comparison. Correctly form sentences (e.g., “they don’t require a license” not “you can it doesn't require”). Aim for 2–3 clear reasons and one specific example to support your opinion.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country for several reasons. Firstly, they are inexpensive and economical, and secondly, they don’t require a driving license or vehicle tax, which makes them accessible. For example, many students and shopkeepers use bicycles for short trips because they are cheap and easy to park.

× I didn't have my own personal bike, but there was 1 bike for me and my sister.

✓ I didn't have my own bike, but there was one bike for my sister and me.

Use of pronouns: 'for me and my sister' is acceptable but formal order is 'my sister and me' and the object pronoun 'me' is correct. Also 'own personal' is redundant; use 'own' or 'personal'. Use the word 'one' instead of the numeral '1' in spoken/written sentence.

× He used to ride it uh. Across the town with our friends and we used to have a lot of fun.

✓ We used to ride it across town with our friends, and we had a lot of fun.

Subject mismatch and sentence fragmentation: The original uses 'He' which incorrectly refers to the bike; a bike cannot be 'he' here. Use 'we' to match 'me and my sister'. Also remove the unnecessary 'uh' and join the fragment 'Across the town' into the main sentence as 'across town'. 'We used to have a lot of fun' is acceptable but more concise is 'we had a lot of fun' or keep 'we used to have a lot of fun' for habitual past.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It matches plural subject 'bikes' with plural predication.

× It's because it's less expensive and you can it doesn't require any license or you didn't have to pay a tax.

✓ It's because they are less expensive, they don't require a license, and you don't have to pay tax.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'It's' (it is) incorrectly refers to 'bikes' (plural), so use 'they are'. Mixed modal/tensed forms were used: 'you can it doesn't require' is incorrect; separate ideas into clauses: 'they don't require a license' (present simple) and 'you don't have to pay tax' (present simple). Use 'pay tax' without 'a' when speaking generally.

× People can travel.

✓ People can travel easily/conveniently.

This sentence is grammatically simple but vague and stylistically incomplete in context. Adding an adverb ('easily' or 'conveniently') clarifies why people use bikes. If left as a general statement it is acceptable, but in context the sentence should explain the reason.