自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct tense, reduce fillers and add one supporting detail with a linking word. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., "I had a bike" then "I remembered"), and replace fillers like "uh." Use one linking word (for example, "because" or "and") to connect your reason or memory.

示例: Yes, I had a black bike when I was a child. My grandfather bought it for me as a gift, and I rode it to school every day because it was faster than walking.

建议: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct small errors, and use linking words to show cause and effect. Replace vague phrases like "in these years" and "I'm leaving Canada right now" (which is grammatically wrong) with precise statements. Provide one or two supporting specifics (e.g., bike lanes, bike-sharing schemes) to strengthen your answer.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Canada, and their use has increased recently because of greater environmental awareness. For example, many cities have added dedicated bike lanes and bike-sharing programs, so more people choose cycling instead of driving.

× I remembered it was a black one.

✓ I remember it was a black one.

The student used past tense 'remembered' after already stating a past fact 'I had a bike when I was a child.' In this context, simple present 'I remember' is more natural to report a lasting memory; keep the reference to the past bike with 'was'. Suggestion: use 'I remember' to indicate a current recollection of a past event.

× I remembered it was a black one.

✓ I remember it was black.

Saying 'a black one' is conversationally acceptable, but more concise and natural here is 'it was black.' Also 'remember' (present) is preferred. Suggestion: prefer 'it was black' for cleaner expression.

× I think it's popular and I think it's getting increasingly popular in these years given the awareness of Environmental Protection.

✓ I think bikes are popular, and I think they have become increasingly popular in recent years because of greater awareness of environmental protection.

Several problems: 'it's' is vague — refer to 'bikes' with 'they' or repeat 'bikes' (article/pronoun clarity). 'In these years' is unnatural; use 'in recent years' or 'over the past few years.' 'Getting increasingly popular' is a progressive change that is better expressed with present perfect 'have become increasingly popular.' 'Environmental Protection' should be lowercase 'environmental protection.' Suggestion: use 'they have become increasingly popular in recent years because of greater awareness of environmental protection.'

× I'm leaving Canada right now.

✓ I live in Canada right now.

The student likely meant current residence rather than 'leaving' which means departing. 'I'm leaving Canada right now' changes the meaning. To express current location/habituation, use 'I live in Canada right now.' Suggestion: use 'I live in Canada' for talking about where you are currently based.

× People here are usually with a strong sense of Environmental Protection.

✓ People here usually have a strong sense of environmental protection.

English does not use 'are with' to express possessing a quality; use 'have a strong sense of ...' Also 'Environmental Protection' should be lowercase. Suggestion: use 'have a strong sense of environmental protection'.

× They prefer to use public transport.

✓ They prefer to use public transportation.

'Public transport' is acceptable in British English, but in many contexts 'public transportation' is more natural in international/Canadian English. This is a style/prepositional choice; no major grammar error, but change for register consistency with 'Canada.' Suggestion: use 'public transportation' if speaking about Canada; otherwise 'public transport' is fine.

× Yes, I think it's popular and I think it's getting increasingly popular in these years given the awareness of Environmental Protection.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular, and I think they have become increasingly popular in recent years given greater awareness of environmental protection.

Original used 'it's' (singular) to refer to 'bikes' (plural), causing a subject-pronoun mismatch. Also tense and phrase choices were awkward. Suggestion: match plural subject with plural pronoun 'they' and use present perfect for trends ('have become').