自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve clarity, grammar and cohesion. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (past tense and articles), avoid fillers (uh) and use one or two specific supporting details with linking words. For example, mention why it was special and how you used it. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue bike with training wheels, so only young children could ride it. I loved riding it around my neighborhood every afternoon because it made me feel independent and helped me explore nearby parks.

建议: Focus on organizing the answer and using correct vocabulary. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, therefore). Use correct terms (e.g., bike-sharing companies, shared bikes) and avoid hesitation words. Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular now. This is mainly because bike-sharing companies have introduced many shared bikes in cities, so people can rent a bike for a short trip easily. As a result, cycling has become a convenient and affordable way to travel for short distances.

× Yes, I had one and that's a blue one.

✓ Yes, I had one and it was a blue one.

The student used present tense 'that's' when referring to a past possession; tense consistency requires past 'it was'. Also 'that's a blue one' sounds like pointing to a current object rather than describing a past bike. Use past tense to match 'I had'. Suggestion: keep past tense for both clauses: 'I had one and it was a blue one.'

× It's smaller than the uh, the standard back so only child can ride it.

✓ It was smaller than the standard bike, so only a child could ride it.

Multiple issues: 'It's' should be 'It was' to match past context. 'back' is incorrect word choice -> 'bike'. Missing article 'a' before 'child' and tense/ability mismatch: 'can' should be past 'could'. Also remove filler words and duplicated 'the'. Suggestion: use correct noun 'bike', include articles, and match past tense: 'It was smaller than the standard bike, so only a child could ride it.'

× Hmm. I think it's popular now because we have so many company to sell the share back, I mean the common back and they can pay a little money to write, uh, for a moment, uh, for, for a few moment.

✓ Hmm. I think bikes are popular now because we have so many companies selling shared bikes, and they can be rented for a small fee for a short time.

This sentence has several grammatical problems addressed under allowed types: 'it's popular' is acceptable but clearer to say 'bikes are popular' (subject clarity). 'so many company' should be plural 'companies' (singular/plural issue). 'to sell the share back' is incorrect phrase: use 'selling shared bikes' or 'renting shared bikes'. 'the common back' is incorrect word choice. 'they can pay' wrongly assigns payment to companies; passive or correct subject needed: 'they can be rented' or 'people can pay'. 'a little money to write' should be 'a small fee to ride'. 'for a moment' should be 'for a short time' and plural 'a few moments' if desired. Suggestion: use plural nouns, correct verbs and gerund forms for continuous actions: 'companies selling shared bikes' and use 'be rented' or 'people can pay a small fee to ride for a short time.'