自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, correct tense and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix hesitations and repeated words (e.g., “my my”). Aim for 2–3 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., “received” or “was given,” “ride” instead of “play around”).

示例: Yes. I had a bike as a child that my parents gave me when I was eight. I rode it home from school and around the neighborhood almost every afternoon, which helped me become more confident cycling on busy streets.

建议: Answer directly and use accurate vocabulary and grammar. Replace unclear phrases like “I used to say them around” with a clear statement. Use linking words (for example, “because” or “for example”) and give a specific reason or example to support your view. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, I often see cyclists on the streets and parked bikes near train stations when I go home from work.

× Yes, umm, I actually have a bike.

✓ Yes, umm, I actually had a bike.

The question asks about having a bike when the student was a child (past time). The verb 'have' should be in past tense to match the time reference. Use 'had' for simple past. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time frame in the question (when you were a child -> use past tense).

× When I was a child my my parents got it for me and I used to play around with it after work after school.

✓ When I was a child my parents got it for me and I used to play with it after school.

Redundant word 'my' should be removed and 'got' is correct past tense. 'Used to play around with it after work after school' mixes contexts and repeats time phrases; 'after school' is appropriate for a child. 'Play around with' is informal but acceptable; simplifying to 'play with' is clearer. Suggestions: Remove duplicate words, keep a single appropriate time expression, and maintain past tense throughout.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct and matches present general truth, so no change is needed. Keep the present simple to state general facts.

× I used to say them around every time.

✓ I used to see them everywhere.

The student used 'say' instead of 'see' and 'around every time' is unnatural. 'See' is the correct verb for visually noticing bikes. 'Everywhere' is the natural adverb to indicate frequent presence. Also 'used to' properly indicates past habitual action. Suggestion: Use 'see' for perception and 'everywhere' for widespread occurrence.

× Especially when I'm going home, I see bikes around.

✓ Especially when I was going home, I saw bikes around.

The student mixes present progressive ('I'm going') with a general present observation ('I see'). Since earlier context asks about general popularity (present) or past habitual—here the student likely means a habitual past action or a present habitual observation. To be consistent with 'bikes are popular' (present), better option would be 'Especially when I go home, I see bikes around.' If referring to past, use past tense as provided. Suggestion: Choose tense to match intended time frame: present habitual -> 'when I go home, I see' ; past habitual -> 'when I was going home, I saw'.