自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và tính logic của câu trả lời, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa lỗi thì và giới từ, nối các ý bằng từ liên kết, và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: tuổi bạn bắt đầu, kỷ niệm cụ thể). Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

示例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me to ride when I was in first grade, and I remember practicing every weekend in front of our house. Because our home was only about 500 metres from school, I often rode my bike to class with my younger sister. Those rides made me feel independent and happy.

建议: Cần bố cục câu rõ ràng, dùng liên từ để nối ý, sửa từ sai (tax cars → taxis) và hoàn thiện ý cuối cùng (ví dụ: so buses are more used). Thêm lý do cụ thể và đưa ví dụ hoặc so sánh ngắn gọn. Giữ câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và không lặp từ.

示例: I think bicycles are less popular now because many people prefer faster vehicles like motorbikes and taxis. Public transport such as buses is more commonly used for longer trips, especially in cities. However, some people still cycle for exercise or short commutes in quieter neighbourhoods.

× Of course, cycling is every child's childhood.

✓ Of course, cycling is part of every child's childhood.

The original sentence is awkward rather than strictly ungrammatical. 'Cycling' as a gerund is fine, but the phrase 'is every child's childhood' is incorrect in collocation. Use a prepositional phrase such as 'part of' to show that cycling is one element of childhood. Suggestion: include a preposition or rephrase to 'part of every child's childhood' to be natural.

× My father taught me ride a bike when I was first grade.

✓ My father taught me to ride a bike when I was in first grade.

After 'teach' the correct pattern is 'teach someone to do something' (to + base verb). Also, the phrase 'when I was first grade' needs the preposition 'in' before a grade. Suggestion: use 'taught me to ride' and 'in first grade'.

× My house was about 500 meter from to school instead.

✓ My house was about 500 meters from the school.

Distance requires a plural 'meters' after a number greater than one. Remove the extraneous preposition 'to' and use 'from the school'—the definite article 'the' is needed because a specific school is implied. Also 'instead' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Suggestion: say 'about 500 meters from the school.'

× I think that nowadays bicycles are less popular due to the development of many modern vehicles such as motorbikes, tax cars.

✓ I think that nowadays bicycles are less popular due to the development of many modern vehicles such as motorbikes and taxis.

'Tax cars' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'taxis' or 'taxi cars' is not natural. Also use 'and' to connect items in a list. Suggestion: replace 'tax cars' with 'taxis' and join with 'and.'

× Buses, however, are.

✓ Buses, however, are still popular.

'Buses, however, are.' is an incomplete sentence because the verb 'are' needs a complement. Add an adjective or phrase like 'still popular' to complete the idea. Suggestion: provide the missing information, e.g., 'are still popular.'