自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, avoid unnecessary words, and add one brief supporting detail. Use linking words if you add extra information. For example, say when you had it and a short comment about how you used it.

示例: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle from the age of six, and I used it every day to ride around my neighborhood.

建议: Organize your answer: begin with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because/so/therefore). Avoid filler words and repetition. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., petrol prices, affordable, convenient). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are more affordable and use less fuel. For example, many people choose motorbikes to commute to work since petrol prices have risen, so they save money and avoid traffic.

× Yes, of course I have, right when I was a child.

✓ Yes, of course I had one when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past simple 'had' to match the past time. Also include an object 'one' or 'a bike' for clarity.

× Rs Of course, in my point of view, I think bikes are very popular in my country due to your stage or time or in other in other sense we we can say that the petrol prices are higher by day by day.

✓ Of course, in my point of view, bikes are very popular in my country because petrol prices have been rising day by day.

This sentence has unclear phrasing and wrong word choices ('Rs', 'your stage or time or in other in other sense') and awkward tense. Use 'because' for reason, and present perfect continuous 'have been rising' or simple present 'are rising' to describe an ongoing increase. Remove redundant words and repeated fragments.

× So it it it saves our cost.

✓ So they save us money.

The subject should be 'they' (bikes) not implied 'it'. 'Save our cost' is unnatural; use 'save us money'. Also remove repeated filler words and use present simple 'save' to state a general fact.