自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, tense consistency and fluency. Begin with a clear topic sentence using past tense, avoid hesitations and filler sounds, and add one or two brief supporting details. Use linking words if adding details (for example: however, although, so).

示例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child, but I loved riding other people’s bicycles. For example, I often borrowed my neighbor’s bike on weekends, and it was one of my favorite activities because it made me feel free and active.

建议: Make the response concise and grammatically correct. Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with clear linking words (for example: because, for instance, therefore). Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use correct subject-verb agreement and natural phrases (e.g., “people use bikes for commuting”).

示例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to commute short distances. For instance, students and office workers often cycle to school or work to avoid traffic and save money.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was child, but I loved, uh, riding bicycles, Uh.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I loved riding bicycles.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with past time reference 'when I was a child'; use past tense 'didn't have'. Also missing the article 'a' before 'child'. Remove filler sounds and extra commas. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for past events and include necessary articles.

× As I think bikes are very uh, popular in my country because everyone is likes to ride by uh, bikes and uh, it's used to uh, everyone EC2UH use.

✓ I think bikes are very popular in my country because everyone likes to ride bikes and they are used by many people.

Use simple present 'I think' rather than 'As I think'. Remove filler words. 'Everyone is likes' is wrong; use 'everyone likes' (subject-verb agreement, present tense). 'ride by bikes' is incorrect preposition—use 'ride bikes'. The passive 'it's used to everyone' is ungrammatical; better: 'they are used by many people' or 'many people use them'. Suggestions: use correct present simple forms, correct prepositions, and clear active or passive constructions.