自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid contradictions (“Yeah, no”) and tense errors. Use a past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Link your supporting detail with a simple connector (for example, “so” or “so I”).

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, whenever I needed to go somewhere, I asked my parents or friends to take me, so I rarely rode on my own.

建议: Start with a clear, direct opinion sentence and then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid filler words (uh, um) and vague phrases (“in nowadays”). Use more precise vocabulary (commute, students, professionals).

示例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them to commute to work or school. For example, students and office workers prefer bikes for short trips because they are cheap and avoid traffic.

× Yeah, no, when I'm in my childhood, I have, I don't have any bike because because whenever I want, I want to travel somewhere and I usually tell to my parents and my friends and they help me to travel somewhere.

✓ No, when I was a child I didn't have a bike because whenever I wanted to go somewhere I would tell my parents or my friends and they would help me get there.

Errors: tense and sentence structure are incorrect for a past context, misuse of 'I'm in my childhood' and 'I have' instead of past forms, redundant words, incorrect 'tell to' construction, and unnatural repetition. Suggestions: Use past simple for past facts ('was', 'didn't have', 'wanted'), use modal or past habitual ('would') for repeated past actions, remove redundant words, and use correct verb+object order ('tell someone' not 'tell to someone').

× Yes, in my perspective, I think that bikes are popular in my country because most of the people in nowadays are, uh, are very busy in their studies and their business and, and they also need a, a good bike to travel, uh, from, from their home to their business and.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, I think bikes are popular in my country because nowadays most people are very busy with their studies and their work, and they need a good bike to travel from home to work.

Errors: awkward word choices and word order ('in my perspective' -> 'in my opinion'), unnecessary filler words, incorrect phrase 'most of the people in nowadays' and awkward 'their business' for 'work'. Suggestions: Use 'nowadays' with 'most people', use 'busy with' for activities, choose 'work' instead of 'business' for daily commuting, remove fillers and duplicated words, and ensure present simple tense for general truths ('are popular', 'need').