自行车— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and use correct past tense. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (past tense, pronouns) and avoid repetition. For example, say you didn’t have a bike, explain why, and mention one consequence or memory.

示例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I never learned how to ride. My father encouraged me to learn, but I was too scared to try, so I usually walked to school instead.

建议: Give a direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and correct word choice. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and correct adjective forms (prestigious, cool). Avoid repetition. Add one example or brief comparison to strengthen your point.

示例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many young people see them as cool and convenient. For example, students often use motorbikes to commute quickly, and some people buy expensive models to show status.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child because I don't know.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't know how to ride.

The sentence mixes present tense ('don't have', 'don't know') with a past time reference ('when I was a child'). Use past tense consistently for past events. Also the clause 'because I didn't know' needs an object (how to ride). Suggestion: Use past simple for both verbs and include 'how to ride' to complete the idea.

× I didn't know how to ride.

✓ I didn't know how to ride.

This sentence is already correct in past tense and matches the time frame 'when I was a child.' No change needed. Keep the past simple 'didn't know' to show lack of ability or knowledge in the past.

× But my father used to force me that you have to ride it or learn it how to ride.

✓ But my father used to force me, saying that I had to ride it or learn how to ride.

The original uses an incorrect reporting structure and mixes tenses and pronouns. Use a reporting phrase ('saying that') and backshift to past tense ('had to') to match 'used to.' Also use 'learn how to ride' not 'learn it how to ride.' Punctuation (comma) helps separate clauses.

× But I was scared of it.

✓ But I was scared of it.

This sentence correctly uses past simple 'was' to describe a past emotional state. No change required.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country and and the young generation loves to ride bikes because it's look them cool and prestig.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country and the younger generation loves to ride them because it makes them look cool and prestigious.

Several issues: 'and and' is a repetition (remove duplicate), 'young generation' should be 'younger generation' (adjective form), subject-verb agreement requires 'the younger generation loves' is acceptable but 'them' refers to bikes so use 'ride them.' The clause 'it's look them cool and prestig' is ungrammatical: use 'it makes them look' and the adjective 'prestigious' rather than 'prestig.' Also ensure pronouns agree (them = people) and 'it' refers to riding or bikes. Suggestion: Use 'makes them look cool and prestigious.'