音乐— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers and correct verb forms (e.g., “if I’m feeling,” “it improves,” “I choose sad music to…”).

示例: It depends on my mood. For example, if I’m feeling energetic, I prefer happy songs because they lift my spirits and make me want to move. Conversely, when I’m feeling low, I sometimes listen to sad music to reflect and feel calm.

建议: Give a direct, concise answer and support it with a clear reason and a specific example. Remove hesitation words and unclear phrases like “go crazy to feel with my.” Use linking words such as “because” or “for example.”

示例: Yes, it usually does because upbeat rhythms and familiar choruses boost my energy. For example, when I hear my favorite pop song, I often sing along and feel more motivated to exercise.

建议: Answer directly and correct verb forms (e.g., “haven’t taken”). Give one clear past detail and a reason why you didn’t continue using linking words such as “because” or “so.” Avoid repetition and fillers.

示例: No, I haven’t taken any formal music classes recently. I had a few lessons in secondary school, but I didn’t continue because I wasn’t very interested in the theory and preferred practicing on my own.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples of activities and the types of music you choose, using correct verb forms and linking words. Remove fillers and awkward phrases like “it’s and give me.”

示例: Yes, definitely. I often listen to music while doing chores or studying because upbeat remixes help me stay focused. For instance, lo-fi helps me concentrate when I study, while energetic remixes make housework feel quicker and more enjoyable.

× I think it depends on what the mood I have that day.

✓ I think it depends on the mood I have that day.

Extra word 'what' is incorrect in this structure. The correct expression is 'depends on the mood I have' (present simple) to show a general condition. Remove 'what' to form a grammatical noun phrase. Suggestion: use 'depends on the mood I have' or 'depends on how I feel that day.'

× For example if I feeling excited I would go for happy music which improve my feeling that day too.

✓ For example, if I am feeling excited, I would choose happy music which improves my mood that day too.

Missing auxiliary 'am' before present participle 'feeling' and wrong verb choice 'go for' can be improved to 'choose'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'which improves' (third person singular) rather than 'improve'. 'Feeling' needs 'be' verb. Suggestion: use 'I am feeling' and ensure verbs agree: 'which improves my mood.'

× But umm if I have a little bit down mood I will go for sad music to stand.

✓ But if I am feeling a little down, I will turn to sad music to cope.

'a little bit down mood' is awkward; use 'feeling a little down' or 'a slightly down mood'. Also 'go for' is acceptable but 'turn to' is natural; 'to stand' is incorrect meaning — likely intended 'to cope'. Use present continuous 'am feeling' to describe current mood. Suggestion: 'If I am feeling a little down, I will turn to sad music to cope.'

× Yes, of course, as I mentioned you umm, whenever I feel I listen to happy music, I will really go crazy to feel with my especially my favorite songs and umm have the same feeling.

✓ Yes, of course. As I mentioned, whenever I feel like it, I listen to happy music; I really go crazy with my favorite songs and feel the same excitement.

Sentence is run-on and has missing words + awkward phrases. 'As I mentioned you' should be 'As I mentioned' or 'As I mentioned to you'. 'Whenever I feel I listen' needs 'like it' or 'that way'. 'Go crazy to feel with my especially my favorite songs' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'go crazy with my favorite songs and feel the same excitement.' Suggestion: split into shorter sentences and add missing words.

× No, I haven't take any formal music classes recently.

✓ No, I haven't taken any formal music classes recently.

After 'haven't' (have not), the past participle form 'taken' is required. 'Take' is base form and incorrect in present perfect. Suggestion: use 'have/has' + past participle: 'haven't taken.'

× I did have some music lessons at secondary school, but I wasn't really interested in uh, involving in that class, so I think that wouldn't, umm, wouldn't continue.

✓ I did have some music lessons at secondary school, but I wasn't really interested in getting involved in that class, so I don't think I would have continued.

'Interested in involving' is incorrect; use 'interested in getting involved' or 'interested in participating'. Tense and modality in last clause are awkward: 'I think that wouldn't... wouldn't continue' should be 'I don't think I would have continued' to reflect past hypothetical. Suggestion: use 'getting involved' and adjust modality to match time reference.

× Yes, definitely. That is part of my uh housework because when I listen to some remix or like lo fi music, my mood will uh would be upped and I can do everything because it's and give me a lot of energy to do that.

✓ Yes, definitely. It's part of my housework because when I listen to remixes or lo-fi music, my mood lifts and I can do everything because it gives me a lot of energy.

Mixed modal 'will would' is incorrect; use simple present 'lifts' for habitual effect. 'Remix' should be plural 'remixes' or 'a remix'; 'lo fi' standardized as 'lo-fi'. 'It's and give me' is ungrammatical; use 'it gives me'. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual effects and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'my mood lifts' and 'it gives me.'