音乐— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更直接、简洁并使用正确的语法。可以先给出明确立场（I prefer happy music），然后用一到两句具体原因支持，例如说明近期压力较大、需要积极的歌词或节奏来提振情绪。注意避免填充词（uh）和重复表达。将句子控制在最多五句内，使用连接词如 because 或 so 来提高连贯性。

示例: I prefer happy music. Recently I’ve been under a lot of pressure, so upbeat songs with positive lyrics help lift my mood and keep me motivated.

建议: 回答要更清晰并使用完整句子。先肯定回答（Yes, it does），然后用一到两句具体解释为什么，例如提到节奏、歌词或旋律如何影响情绪。避免非标准表达（'you got'）和语法错误，使用连接词 like 或 because 来组织原因。

示例: Yes, it does. Upbeat rhythms and positive lyrics make me feel energised because they change my mood and make me want to move or sing along.

建议: 回答应更有条理并用正确时态。先直接回答（Yes, I have），然后说明什么时候和哪种课程（primary and middle school music lessons），并给出一两个具体细节（学过唱歌、乐器或音乐理论）。避免不自然的表达如 'there always got' 或含糊的短语。把句子控制在三到四句内。

示例: Yes, I have. I took compulsory music classes in primary and middle school where we learned singing and basic music theory. I also practised simple instruments like the recorder, which helped me understand rhythm and pitch.

建议: 回答要结构化：先直接回答（It depends），接着分别说明具体情境（studying vs other activities）并给出简明理由。避免重复和填充词，使用连词 such as when / because / but 来提高连贯性。例如说明音乐在学习时分心，但在做家务或锻炼时能提升心情或自信。

示例: It depends. I don’t listen to music when I study because it distracts me, but I often play music while exercising or doing household chores because it makes me feel more energetic and confident.

× It depends, but recently I would more prefer for the happy music cause uh, now I give a little bit more pressure to myself.

✓ It depends, but recently I prefer happy music because I've been putting a little more pressure on myself.

本句中“would more prefer for”结构不正确，动词prefer后直接接名词/动名词，不用for或would more。将时态调整为现在完成进行时（have been putting）更好地表达“最近一直更给自己压力”的含义。建议：prefer后直接接名词或动名词；表达近期持续动作可用现在完成进行时（have/has been + -ing）。

× So I want to get some more happier, more positive music to me to make me feeling happy.

✓ So I want to listen to happier, more positive music to make me feel happy.

“more happier”是重复比较（happier已为比较级），应为happier或more happy（但前者更自然）。“get ... to me”用法不自然，改为listen to。动词短语“make me feeling”错误，应为make me feel（使役动词后接动词原形）。建议：避免重复比较级，使用listen to表示听音乐，使役结构用make + 人 + 动词原形。

× And 'cause you got really positive lyrics and also a really good music, that feeling you positive.

✓ Because it has really positive lyrics and really good music, it makes you feel positive.

口语缩写“'cause”可写作because。主语应为it（指音乐），动词用has（第三人称单数）。“you got”非标准书面表达；“that feeling you positive”语序和结构错误，应为it makes you feel positive。建议：主语为it时使用第三人称单数动词，表达“使某人感觉”用make sb feel + 形容词。

× In my primary school and the middle school there always got the music classes that I must be in and also before I play bowling.

✓ In primary and middle school there were always music classes that I had to attend, and I also took music lessons before I played baseball.

原句中“there always got”为非标准，正式表达用there were。必须参加用had to attend。原句“before I play bowling”时态和词汇错误：若指以前打保龄球前学过音乐，应使用过去时和正确词汇（played/played bowling或played baseball/played the piano等，依上下文此处不确定球类，已改为更常见的结构）。建议：过去发生的事用一般过去时，使用had to attend表示必须参加，避免口语俚语got。

× So I take a lot of learning in the music perspective.

✓ So I did a lot of learning from the musical perspective.

“take a lot of learning”搭配不自然，常用do a lot of learning或have a lot of lessons；“in the music perspective”应为from the musical perspective或from a musical perspective。时态用过去式更符合上下文。建议：使用自然搭配如do a lot of learning / had many music lessons；表达角度用from the ... perspective。

× It depends on what things are doing.

✓ It depends on what I am doing.

原句缺少主语，语序和代词使用错误。应明确主语（I）并使用现在进行时表示正在做的事情。建议：表达“取决于我在做什么”使用It depends on what I am doing / what I'm doing。

× I think when through my studies I will not play music causing I think it confused me and they will contribute to my uh uh time

✓ I think when I'm studying I won't play music because I think it confuses me and it wastes my time.

原句中“when through my studies”不自然，应为when I'm studying。将将来时改为一般将来否定won't，但更自然用现在时或将来时皆可。cause -> because，confused me应为confuses me（一般真理/习惯用现在时）。“they will contribute to my time”表达错误，意为浪费时间应为waste my time或take up my time。建议：使用when I'm studying, don't play music; 表达习惯/普遍事实用一般现在时。

× and while doing other things maybe play music will make me feel more confident.

✓ And while doing other things, playing music might make me feel more confident.

短语“play music will”语序不自然，应将动词转换为动名词（playing music）作为主语。根据不确定语气用might/may或will，原句“maybe”位置不当。建议：使用Playing music might/may make me feel more confident；动名词作主语时保持 -ing 形式。