音乐— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence (state preference depends on situation), then give one specific supporting detail with a linking word and a brief example. Avoid fillers (“like”, “want to like”) and repetition.

示例: It depends on the situation. When I’m upset or anxious, I often choose sad music because its slow melodies help me calm down. On the other hand, when I’m happy or exercising, I prefer upbeat music to keep my energy high.

建议: Use a clear topic sentence and link reasons with concise phrasing. Reduce redundancy (e.g., “feeling good” and “happy” both). Correct grammar: subject-verb agreement and word order. Provide one specific example of when happy music increases excitement.

示例: Yes, it does. Happy music usually lifts my energy and concentration, so I feel more excited and motivated. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs before a workout or a presentation, I perform with more confidence and energy.

× Well, it's depend on the like situation.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation.

The verb 'depend' must agree with the singular subject 'it' in the present simple, so use 'depends' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'the like' is unnecessary and ungrammatical; use 'the situation' or simply 'situation' for clarity.

× Sometime I prefer happy music and sometimes sad.

✓ Sometimes I prefer happy music and sometimes sad music.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) instead of 'sometime'. Also parallel structure requires repeating the noun 'music' after 'sad' or using 'sad' as an adjective modifying 'music' by adding the noun; otherwise meaning can be unclear.

× Because sometime when I'm feeling sad or worried or like that then I want to like prefer sad music so that I feel relaxed and calm.

✓ Because sometimes when I'm feeling sad or worried or like that, I prefer sad music so that I can feel relaxed and calm.

Use 'sometimes' (correct adverb) and remove filler words 'like' and redundant 'want to like prefer'—'prefer' alone suffices. Also add 'can' to indicate purpose/result ('so that I can feel'). Punctuation (comma) improves sentence flow.

× But when I'm in a good mood then I want to listen.

✓ But when I'm in a good mood, I want to listen to happy music.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' and an object (what to listen to). Adding 'happy music' clarifies meaning. Remove unnecessary 'then' for natural English and add a comma.

× Yeah, I think so. When I'm listening like the happy music, I'm feeling more excited, energetic and my mood is like feeling good and I feel relaxed, happy.

✓ Yeah, I think so. When I'm listening to happy music, I feel more excited and energetic, and my mood feels good; I feel relaxed and happy.

Use 'listening to' with preposition 'to'. Avoid filler 'like'. Use simple present 'I feel' rather than progressive 'I'm feeling' for habitual or general reactions. 'My mood is like feeling good' is ungrammatical—use 'my mood feels good'. Use clearer punctuation and parallel structure.

× So yeah, it feel me more excited for the things what which I'm doing.

✓ So yeah, it makes me more excited about the things I'm doing.

'It' requires a singular verb 'makes' not 'feel' when expressing cause ('it makes me excited'). Use 'about' with 'excited' to indicate the target. Remove redundant 'what which' and simplify to 'the things I'm doing'.