教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and correct grammar; use one clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details. Replace filler sounds and unclear words. Use correct adjectives and verb forms, and avoid repeating the same idea.

示例: My favourite teacher in high school was my English teacher because she was very patient and explained things clearly. For example, she stayed after class to give extra help to students who were struggling, which made learning much easier.

建议: Answer directly and use correct tense and prepositions. Give a brief reason and one supporting detail. Avoid awkward phrasing like “I did not prefer” and “respect of”.

示例: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I am interested in becoming a cosmetologist because I enjoy beauty and styling work, but I have a lot of respect for teachers and what they do.

建议: Avoid irrelevant or awkward comments (e.g. 'beautiful with brain'). Focus on specific contributions the teacher made. Use clearer vocabulary and fewer fillers. Provide one concrete example of how she helped.

示例: Yes, I vividly remember my high school English teacher because she boosted my confidence. For instance, she encouraged me to take part in class presentations, which helped me speak more confidently in public.

建议: Use correct negative forms and more natural phrasing. Give a short reason and, if possible, mention any attempts to reconnect. Remove filler words and redundancies.

示例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because many years have passed and we lost contact. I haven't tried to reconnect, but I sometimes think about reaching out on social media.

建议: Organize your answer: start with a topic sentence, then give two specific ways she helped. Use precise verbs (e.g. 'gave extra tutoring' not 'extra trips') and avoid trailing off. Provide a concrete example of an event or activity.

示例: She helped me in two ways: she gave extra tutoring after class to explain difficult topics, and she encouraged me to practice public speaking by assigning short speeches. As a result, I became much more fluent and confident on stage.

建议: Give a clear direct answer and support it with one or two concise reasons. Avoid repetitive phrases and incomplete sentences. Correct grammar: use 'liked' or 'prefer' and complete your final thought.

示例: No, I prefer my high school teachers because they helped me develop confidence and communication skills. Thanks to them, I can speak easily with different kinds of people and perform well in presentations.

× Uh, she's very kind, kind hearted, detective and patient.

✓ She was very kind, kind-hearted, dedicated, and patient.

The student used present 'she's' while referring to a past teacher; tense should match context (past). 'kind hearted' should be hyphenated as 'kind-hearted' when used before a noun or as a compound adjective. 'detective' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'dedicated'. Also commas and conjunctions needed to list adjectives correctly. Suggestion: Use correct adjective choice and hyphenation and keep tense consistent: 'She was very kind, kind-hearted, dedicated, and patient.'

× She explained the topic very clearly and give extra help to everyone uh, and which class which.

✓ She explained the topics very clearly and gave extra help to everyone in the class.

The coordinated verbs must share the same tense: 'explained' is past, so 'give' should be past 'gave' (past simple). 'the topic' is better as plural 'the topics' or 'a topic' depending on meaning. The phrase 'which class which' is unclear; likely intended 'in the class.' Suggestion: Maintain consistent past tense and use clear prepositional phrase: 'She explained the topics very clearly and gave extra help to everyone in the class.'

× No, I did not prefer to become a teacher in future because I have interest.

✓ No, I did not want to become a teacher in the future because I am interested in cosmetology.

Mixes past 'did not prefer' with present 'I have interest' and an unclear noun. Use 'did not want' or 'prefer' correctly; 'in future' needs article 'in the future.' 'I have interest' is incorrect collocation; use 'I am interested in' plus the correct field 'cosmetology' (noun). Suggestion: Keep consistent tense and use correct collocations: 'I did not want to become a teacher in the future because I am interested in cosmetology.'

× I am interested in cosmetologist but I really respect of this profession.

✓ I am interested in becoming a cosmetologist, but I really respect this profession.

'Interested in cosmetologist' is wrong because 'cosmetologist' is a person; use 'becoming a cosmetologist' or 'cosmetology.' 'Respect of this profession' is incorrect preposition use; say 'respect this profession.' Suggestion: Use correct noun forms and prepositions: 'interested in becoming a cosmetologist' and 'respect this profession.'

× Yes, I vividly remember in my high school, my English teacher was literally very beautiful and uh, beautiful with brain.

✓ Yes, I vividly remember that in my high school my English teacher was very beautiful and intelligent.

Redundant 'literally' and awkward phrase 'beautiful with brain' should be 'intelligent.' 'Remember in my high school' needs 'that' for clarity. Suggestion: Remove filler words and use appropriate adjective for intelligence: 'very beautiful and intelligent.'

× She also give me sport and strength, uh, and uh, she gave me more confidence to speak.

✓ She also gave me support and strength, and she gave me more confidence to speak.

'Give' must match past tense 'gave.' 'Sport' is incorrect word choice; likely 'support.' Maintain consistent past simple tense for actions that happened in the past. Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary and past tense: 'gave me support and strength.'

× No, I did not in touch with my primary school teachers because, uh, there are a lot of years we separated now, so I have no contact with each other nowadays.

✓ No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because many years have passed since we separated, so I have no contact with them now.

'Did not in touch' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'am not in touch' or 'did not stay in touch.' Mixing tenses and awkward phrasing 'there are a lot of years we separated now' should be 'many years have passed since we separated.' 'Contact with each other' should be 'contact with them.' Suggestion: Use correct present perfect to express duration and proper object pronoun: 'many years have passed since we separated' and 'no contact with them now.'

× My favorite teacher gave me some extra trips after a section and class uh, Moreover, they, she always, umm, encouraged me to, uh, speak fluently, confidently at the stage and, uh, make speeches for me.

✓ My favorite teacher gave me some extra practice after lessons and classes. Moreover, she always encouraged me to speak fluently and confidently on stage and helped me make speeches.

Confusing pronoun use 'they, she' should be consistently 'she.' 'Extra trips' is wrong word; likely 'extra practice' or 'extra help.' 'After a section and class' is unclear; use 'after lessons and classes.' 'At the stage' should be 'on stage.' Suggestion: Use consistent pronouns, correct collocations, and prepositions: 'she encouraged me to speak fluently and confidently on stage and helped me prepare speeches.'

× She's very.

✓ She was very kind and supportive.

Fragment 'She's very.' is incomplete and lacks an object or complement. Complete the sentence with appropriate adjectives matching context and tense. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; finish the idea: 'She was very kind and supportive.'

× No, my favorite teachers are also in the high in the high school because they built me like this.

✓ No, my favorite teachers are also in high school because they helped shape me this way.

Awkward repetition 'in the high in the high school' — use 'in high school.' 'Built me like this' is unnatural; use 'helped shape me this way.' Suggestion: Use natural collocations: 'helped shape me' and avoid redundant words.

× So now I can easily and confidently speak to speak with everyone and communicate with the every type of people.

✓ So now I can easily and confidently speak with everyone and communicate with all types of people.

Redundant 'speak to speak' should be 'speak' or 'speak with.' 'Communicate with the every type of people' is ungrammatical; correct is 'all types of people.' Suggestion: Remove redundancy and use correct quantifier 'all types of people.'

× So I think my higher education.

✓ So I think it is because of my higher education.

Fragment 'So I think my higher education.' is incomplete and unclear. Add a verb and clarify the relationship: 'it is because of my higher education' or 'my higher education helped me.' Suggestion: Complete the clause to express cause or result clearly.