教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and consistent in pronouns; start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details linked with connectors. Avoid repetition and filler sounds. For example, state who the teacher is, one concrete background detail, and one way they influenced you.

示例: Yes, I do — my favorite teacher is my university linguistics professor. She studied and worked in Chicago for eight years, which gave her a broad perspective on language teaching, and she introduced creative activities that made lessons much more engaging for me.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and explain reasons with linking words. Specify what kind of higher-education teaching you mean and a concrete example of an interesting lesson or schedule benefit.

示例: Yes, I want to teach at the university level because it offers more flexible hours and the chance to design research-oriented courses. For instance, I would create a seminar on sociolinguistics that includes project-based assignments and guest lectures from industry experts.

建议: Begin with a clear statement and then give specific examples of memorable behavior and its impact, using linking words to clarify cause and effect. Avoid unclear phrases (‘knowledge of the cross’) and correct grammar (tenses, pronouns).

示例: Yes, I remember an old teacher who often criticized my performance even though I worked hard. Because of her strict feedback, I became more determined to improve; for example, I spent extra hours studying grammar and eventually raised my grades.

建议: Answer directly and give one or two clear specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and vague wording; use past tense correctly and give concrete details about why staying in touch is difficult.

示例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because I lost contact after we moved away several years ago, and I do not have their current addresses or social media details.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence, then list two concrete ways she helped you, linked with connectors. Use precise verbs (wrote, advised) and avoid hesitations.

示例: She helped me in several concrete ways: for example, she wrote a strong recommendation letter for my overseas applications, and she advised me on which linguistics courses and research topics to pursue.

建议: Give a clear direct answer and then explain with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (plural/singular) and avoid repetition. Clarify the comparison—state which you prefer and why.

示例: No, I prefer my high school teachers because they were more consistent and I had longer-term relationships with them; in contrast, primary school teachers changed frequently, so I did not form strong bonds.

× So I like him.

✓ So I like her.

The student refers to a female teacher earlier ('she'), so the pronoun should be 'her' to match gender and object position. Use the object pronoun 'her' after 'like'.

× she had experience in studying in America and she had worked at Chicago for eight years.

✓ She had experience studying in America and she worked in Chicago for eight years.

The past perfect ('had') is unnecessary when just describing past background information; simple past ('studied/worked') is more appropriate. Also 'worked in Chicago' is the correct preposition for a city.

× she had worked at Chicago for eight years.

✓ She worked in Chicago for eight years.

Use 'in' for cities ('in Chicago') not 'at'. Also simple past is better here to state a past fact.

× she also brings, brings some, uh, new ideas to me.

✓ She also brought some new ideas to me.

The speaker describes past actions of the teacher, so verbs should be in past tense ('brought'). Also avoid repetition. Subject-verb agreement requires the verb form to match tense and subject.

× I want to be the teacher in the future, especially in the higher education, higher education, as as I become the teacher in the higher education system, I have more time for myself and prepare, uh, lots of interesting lessons to my students.

✓ I want to be a teacher in the future, especially in higher education, because as a teacher in higher education I will have more time for myself and can prepare many interesting lessons for my students.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before general professions. Reduce repetition ('higher education'). Future intention is better expressed with 'will' or 'can'. Use 'for my students' instead of 'to my students'.

× I want to be the teacher in the future

✓ I want to be a teacher in the future

When speaking about a profession in general, use the indefinite article 'a', not 'the'. 'The' implies a specific known teacher.

× I still remember that the she always scold me and said that I'm not good at studying and I not sensitive to the knowledge of the of the cross and although I study, I work hard.

✓ I still remember that she always scolded me and said that I wasn't good at studying and not receptive to cross-disciplinary knowledge, although I studied and worked hard.

Remove extra article 'the' before 'she'. Match past tense throughout ('scolded', 'wasn't', 'studied', 'worked'). Use 'receptive to' rather than 'sensitive to' for learning. Clean up repetition and word order.

× I not sensitive to the knowledge of the of the cross

✓ I wasn't receptive to cross-disciplinary knowledge

Use appropriate adjective 'receptive' and correct negation 'wasn't'. 'Cross-disciplinary' is a clearer modifier; remove extraneous articles.

× She couldn't please.

✓ She couldn't be pleased.

To express that the teacher could not be satisfied, use passive form 'be pleased'. The original lacks the correct passive auxiliary and past participle.

× No, I don't keep in touch my keep touch with my primary school teacher

✓ No, I don't keep in touch with my primary school teachers

The correct expression is 'keep in touch with' followed by the object. Use plural 'teachers' if referring to more than one. Remove duplicated fragment.

× the first reason that I don't have the contest right now and and maybe they leave live to live left my primary school maybe for several years and I couldn't I can't find where to find them.

✓ The main reason is that I don't have contact with them now; they may have left my primary school several years ago and I can't find them.

Use 'contact' (noun) not 'contest'. Keep tense consistent: 'left' for past action and 'can't' for present inability. Remove repetitions and unclear phrasing.

× Uh, what ways? Well, it is hard to say for me because the my favorite teacher helped me in several ways is for example, she helped me to construct my recommendation letter to my further studies in overseas and she she provides some suggestions for my future studies in linguistics.

✓ It's hard to say; my favorite teacher helped me in several ways. For example, she helped me write my recommendation letter for further studies overseas and provided suggestions for my future studies in linguistics.

Fix sentence fragments and word order. Use 'helped me write' (common collocation) and 'for further studies overseas' (preposition and word order). Keep tense consistent: past simple for past actions.

× construct my recommendation letter to my further studies in overseas

✓ write my recommendation letter for further studies overseas

Use 'for' to indicate purpose ('for further studies') and do not use 'in' before 'overseas'; 'overseas' follows the noun. 'Write' or 'prepare' is a more natural verb than 'construct' here.

× No, I don't really think that I like primary school primary school teacher more than high school teacher.

✓ No, I don't really think that I like primary school teachers more than high school teachers.

Fix redundancy and plural agreement. Use plural forms when making general comparisons between groups of teachers.

× As a primary school teacher change over time maybe once a year so I saw many diff many primary schools teacher as in a high school.

✓ Primary school teachers change more often, maybe once a year, so I saw many different primary school teachers compared with high school.

Clarify conjunctions and sequence: rephrase to show cause and contrast. Use comparative structure 'compared with' and correct adjective 'different'.

× Maybe the teacher can change most so maybe I tend to prefer.

✓ Teachers change more frequently, so I tend to prefer high school teachers.

Clarify the comparison and complete the sentence with the object of preference. Use 'more frequently' for comparison and state which group is preferred.