教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise and add one specific detail about what she taught or how she inspired you. Use a clear topic sentence, one supporting detail and a closing comment. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and repetition.

示例: Yes. My favourite teacher was my accounting lecturer during my master’s degree. She explained difficult concepts clearly and gave practical examples from real businesses, which helped me understand how accounting applies to careers. Because of her guidance I decided to pursue a finance-related career.

建议: Correct grammar and word choice, give one or two specific reasons why teaching appeals to you, and use linking words for clarity. Keep it within three to four sentences and avoid vocabulary mistakes like 'cherries' and plural errors.

示例: Yes, I would like to become a teacher if I get the chance. I enjoy sharing my knowledge with students because helping them improve their skills feels very rewarding. For example, I like mentoring people and seeing their progress motivates me to continue teaching.

建议: Make the answer fluent and accurate: correct word order, tense and vocabulary. State the subject and one specific memory or quality of the teacher. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler sounds.

示例: Yes. I remember my German language teacher from school very clearly. She made lessons fun with games and role-plays, so I enjoyed attending her class and improved quickly because she was patient and encouraging.

建议: This answer is generally clear but can be improved for grammar and coherence. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a brief reason and an example of how distance prevents contact. Use present or past tense consistently.

示例: No, I'm not. I moved to Sydney and most of my primary school teachers still live in Thailand, so it's been difficult to stay in contact. For instance, I rarely use social media with them, and we only exchange messages on special occasions.

建议: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and two specific examples of help (academic and emotional). Correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and remove fillers. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'also' to connect ideas.

示例: She helped me in two main ways. Academically, she clarified difficult topics and gave extra examples when I was confused; for example, she reviewed key accounting problems after class. She also supported me emotionally — when I felt stressed or overwhelmed, she offered advice and encouragement that helped me continue my studies.

× Yes they do umm I have a favorite teacher she taught me when I was in master degree and she umm teach and she taught me in accounting as admire her so much because she taught me lots of things and inspired me about my future.

✓ Yes, I do. Umm, I have a favorite teacher. She taught me when I was doing my master's degree, and she taught me accounting. I admire her so much because she taught me many things and inspired me about my future.

The sentence uses incorrect and inconsistent pronouns and subjects (e.g., 'Yes they do' should be 'Yes, I do') and has sentence fragments and tense inconsistencies. Break into clear sentences, use the correct subject pronoun 'I', use the possessive form 'master's degree', and parallel verb forms ('taught' consistently). Use 'many' instead of 'lots of' for more formal correctness.

× Yes, I would like to be a teachers in the futures if I get the chance.

✓ Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future if I get the chance.

'Teachers' is plural but the sentence refers to one profession, so use the singular 'teacher'. 'Futures' is incorrect; use the singular noun phrase 'the future' to refer to time ahead.

× I enjoy cherries my knowledge with students because helping others learnings and improving their knowledge or their skill would be something very rewarding.

✓ I enjoy sharing my knowledge with students because helping others learn and improve their knowledge or skills is very rewarding.

'Cherries' is a mispronunciation; correct word 'sharing' (verb + -ing). 'Helping others learnings' is incorrect: use the verb 'learn' after 'helping' and plural 'skills'. Use 'is' to agree with the gerund phrase 'helping... is very rewarding'.

× Yes, I have one of my beloved teacher cheese, uh taught me in Germans in Deutsche language, which I was very enjoy and very happy to be in her class.

✓ Yes, I had one beloved teacher, she taught me German (Deutsch), and I really enjoyed and was very happy to be in her class.

Pronoun and noun forms are incorrect: 'one of my beloved teacher' should be 'one beloved teacher' or 'one of my beloved teachers' if plural. 'Cheese' is an error; likely filler. 'Germans in Deutsche language' should be 'German (Deutsch)'. Use past tense 'had' and 'enjoyed' to match the past context.

× She very helpful.

✓ She was very helpful.

Missing the verb 'was' (linking verb) before the adjective 'very helpful'. Use past tense 'was' to match the rest of the past narrative.

× Not anymore because then I move here in Sydney because most of my, I mean all of my teachers are in Thailand, so it's very difficult to keep in touch with them when you're overseas.

✓ Not anymore, because I moved here to Sydney. Most of my, I mean all of my, teachers are in Thailand, so it's very difficult to keep in touch with them when you're overseas.

Use past tense 'moved' instead of 'move' to describe a completed action. Use preposition 'to Sydney'. Otherwise sentence structure improved by splitting into two sentences.

× Most of the time teacher to help me on clarifying things that I don't understand associate to the subject.

✓ Most of the time the teacher helped me clarify things that I didn't understand related to the subject.

Sentence has incorrect structure and word choices: 'teacher to help me on clarifying' should be 'the teacher helped me clarify'. Use past tense 'helped' and 'didn't understand'. Replace 'associate to' with 'related to'.

× Besides sometime when I have umm stress or feel overwhelmed about the subject, UH they also help me overcome that issue which UMM helped me a lot.

✓ Also, sometimes when I felt stressed or overwhelmed by a subject, they helped me overcome that, which helped me a lot.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) and past tense 'felt' to match context. 'Stressed' is adjective. Use preposition 'by' a subject. Remove filler sounds and make pronoun reference clear. Correct redundant phrasing 'which helped me a lot'.