教师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevap doğrudan ve anlaşılır. Ancak dilbilgisi hataları (which → who; will helps → helps; learning → learn) ve gereksiz kelime seçimi var. Cümleleri daha doğal yapmak için tekil-çoğul uyumuna dikkat et, gereksiz gelecek zaman kullanılmasın ve destekleyici detayları bağlaçlarla bağla. Ayrıca cevap uzunluğunu 2–3 cümlede tutup daha spesifik örnek ver.

示例: Yes, my favorite teacher is my master's supervisor, who helps me learn new techniques in control systems. For example, he gave me practical projects that improved my problem-solving skills and made me a better engineer.

建议: Mesaj açık ama bazı dilbilgisi ve yapı sorunları var (actually I am a teacher — çelişki; Marmar → Marmara; which → where; conduct my Masters of Science study at their → I am doing my master's at the university). Cümleleri netleştir ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkar. Eğer şu an öğretmensen bunu net ifade et ve görevini ve bağlamı kısaca belirt.

示例: Yes. I am currently a teacher working as a research assistant at Marmara University, where I am also doing my Master of Science. Teaching and supervising students has reinforced my desire to pursue a long-term career in education.

建议: Cevap belirsiz ve dilbilgisi hataları çok (come across with → come across; That's why I become → That’s why I decided to become one). Ayrıca negatif ifade yerine daha açıklayıcı ve spesifik örnek ver: geçmiş deneyimler seni nasıl etkiledi, hangi eksiklikleri görmek seni motive etti? Bağlaçlarla mantığı güçlendir.

示例: I actually don't remember a specific inspiring teacher from my past because I felt many of my teachers focused only on theory. That experience motivated me to become a teacher so I could combine theory with practical examples and better support students.

建议: Cevap net ama kararsız ve dolambaçlı ifadeler var (and my, I think friends, primary school friends — düzensiz; I lost the opportunity to stick around — daha doğal söylenebilir). Cümleyi sadeleştir, kesinlik derecesini azaltmak için net bir ifade kullan ve kısa bir neden ekle.

示例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers or most of my primary school friends. Over the years I moved cities for university and work, so I lost contact with them.

建议: Cevap tekrarlı ve belirsiz (helps me, uh, about). Eksik detay ve örnekler var; daha spesifik olun: hangi konularda yardımcı oldu, hangi proje ya da beceri gelişti? Bağlaçlarla neden-sonuç ilişkisi kur ve gereksiz doldurma sözcüklerinden kaçın.

示例: My supervisor has helped me by advising on experimental design and giving feedback on my control algorithms. As a result, I improved my coding and modeling skills and delivered a successful simulation for my thesis.

× Yes, I have a favorite teacher which is my supervisor in my masters program.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher who is my supervisor in my master's program.

Use 'who' for people instead of 'which' and use the possessive form 'master's program'. This fixes incorrect relative pronoun use and an article/possessive error.

× He will helps me learning new things and be a better engineer in my area.

✓ He helps me learn new things and become a better engineer in my field.

Do not add 's' after 'will' and when using present simple for habitual actions use 'helps' (third person singular). Also use the base form 'learn' after 'helps' and 'become' to match parallel structure; replace 'area' with 'field' for natural collocation.

× I work as a research assistant in Marmar University which I conduct my Masters of Science study at their.

✓ I work as a research assistant at Marmara University, where I am conducting my Master of Science studies.

Use 'at' with university and 'where' for reference to place. Use 'Marmara' spelling, 'Master of Science' and plural 'studies' or 'my Master's degree'. Use present continuous 'am conducting' to indicate ongoing study and 'there' should not be 'their'.

× Actually, I don't have a teacher that I remember from the past because I didn't come across with some good teachers.

✓ Actually, I don't have a teacher I remember from the past because I did not come across any good teachers.

Do not use 'that' after 'teacher' when 'I remember' follows; 'any' fits negative context better than 'some', and the verb 'come across' does not take 'with'. Use 'did not' for past negative.

× That's why I become.

✓ That's why I became one.

Use past tense 'became' instead of 'become' to match 'That's why' referring to a past reason; add 'one' to clarify 'teacher'.

× That's why I want to become a teacher, I think.

✓ That's why I want to become a teacher, I think.

This sentence is acceptable; no grammatical change needed. Keep as is. (Minor style: comma before 'I think' is fine.)

× No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers and my, I think friends, primary school friends, but I think I lost the opportunity to stick around, I guess.

✓ No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers or my primary school friends; I think I lost the opportunity to keep in touch.

Use 'or' to connect teachers and friends, remove awkward parenthetical phrasing, and use 'keep in touch' instead of 'stick around'. Keep tenses consistent.

× I work in control systems area in mechanical engineering department and my supervisor helps me, uh, about.

✓ I work in the control systems area of the Mechanical Engineering Department, and my supervisor helps me with my work.

Use 'in the control systems area' and 'of the Mechanical Engineering Department' for correct prepositions and capitalization. 'Helps me with my work' is a complete, natural phrase; remove filler 'uh' and incomplete 'about'.

× He really helps me to improve myself in that area and become a better engineer I think.

✓ He really helps me improve in that area and become a better engineer, I think.

Use 'helps me improve' (omit 'to') for natural English and keep parallel infinitive 'become'. Add a comma before 'I think' for clarity.