整洁— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 句子多处语法错误与用词不当，表达不够简洁。建议使用一个明确的主题句，然后用1–2个补充细节，并注意动词时态与搭配（例如："when everything is organized"，"helped me to focus"）。尽量避免模糊词如“later life”，可改为“daily life”。

示例: Yes, I do. When everything is organized I feel calm and comfortable, which helps me concentrate better. For example, a tidy desk makes it easier for me to start working without distractions.

建议: 回答结构基本正确但重复较多，语法和搭配需改进（例如："used to" 的使用，动词时态一致），并用更具体的细节说明父母如何影响你。避免笼统表述如“significant impact”。

示例: Yes, I used to. My parents asked me to tidy my room every day, so I developed the habit of putting toys and books away. This routine has stayed with me and still helps me stay organized now.

建议: 回答不够清晰且含混，句子冗长且词序与搭配错误。建议先给出主题句，然后列出1–2个具体方法并用连接词衔接（例如："for example", "I also"）。明确工具和做法，例如收纳盒、文件夹、定期整理。

示例: I usually keep my desk tidy by putting items in designated places. For example, I use a pen holder and file folders for documents, and I clear my desktop every evening so it is ready for the next day.

建议: 观点明确但表达笼统且语法有误。建议用一两句话给出原因并用连接词展开，提供具体结果或例子。注意搭配，如"benefits to keeping things tidy"或"benefits of being tidy"，以及短语顺序。

示例: Yes, I think so. Being tidy improves my mood and reduces stress, and it also helps me find things quickly — for instance, I never waste time looking for my keys when everything has a place.

× Yes, I really enjoy keeping things tidy because when everything be organized I feel comfortable and relaxed.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy keeping things tidy because when everything is organized I feel comfortable and relaxed.

句子中使用了虛擬或存在句型的動詞“be”時，應根據現在時用適當的形式。此處描述的是一個一般事實（當一切被整理好時），應使用被動的現在時“is organized”。建議：學習“There is/are”和被動語態在現在時的正確形式，並在類似描述一般真理或習慣時使用現在時（is/are + 過去分詞）。

× It helped me focus on myself and be unstressful in the later life.

✓ It helps me focus on myself and be less stressed later in life.

原句混合了時態和詞彙用法錯誤。“helped”是過去時，前文談論習慣性喜好應用現在時“helps”。“be unstressful”不是自然的說法，應用“be less stressed”或“feel less stressed”。此外“in the later life”不地道，改為“later in life”。建議：根據句子語境統一時態（談常態用現在時），使用常見形容詞搭配（less stressed）。

× Yes, it was quite tidy when I was a child because my parents always told me to keep tidy and have the good habit.

✓ Yes, it was quite tidy when I was a child because my parents always told me to keep it tidy and to develop good habits.

原句中缺少受詞“it”（keep tidy -> keep it tidy），並且“have the good habit”搭配不當，應使用不定式表目的“to develop good habits”或“to form good habits”。時態“was/always told”保留為過去時是合適的。建議：注意及物動詞需要受詞，使用不定式表目的或習慣形成。

× It also become my personal habit in the later life, which always has significant impact on me.

✓ It also became my personal habit later in life, which has always had a significant impact on me.

此處談及從過去形成的習慣，應使用過去時“became”。關於影響的描述，時間順序導致需要完成時或過去影響，用“has always had a significant impact”更自然。原句“in the later life”不地道，改為“later in life”。建議：區分動作發生時間並選擇相應時態；學習現在完成時表示從過去持續到現在的影響。

× Normally I prefer to simply find the tools that I used in my workplace to make sure all the things can be arranged in the suitable position and such as the laptop notebook, I prefer to use it.

✓ Normally I prefer to simply find the tools that I use in my workplace to make sure all the things can be arranged in suitable positions; for example, I prefer to use a laptop.

原句時態混亂（used 應為現在時 use，描述習慣用現在時）。短語“in the suitable position”不自然，應使用複數“suitable positions”。“and such as the laptop notebook, I prefer to use it”結構混亂，應重寫為“for example, I prefer to use a laptop”。建議：描述常態時用現在時，避免冗長和重複，使用簡潔的舉例語句。

× Yes, there are several benefits for us to keep tidy whatever in the workplace or bedroom because it can give us a good mood all day and besides that it also can help us remember.

✓ Yes, there are several benefits to keeping things tidy, whether in the workplace or the bedroom, because it can put us in a good mood all day and can also help us remember things.

原句中“benefits for us to keep tidy”搭配不當，應使用“benefits to keeping”或“benefits of keeping”。“whatever in the workplace or bedroom”語法錯誤，改為“whether in the workplace or the bedroom”。“give us a good mood”不自然，應用“put us in a good mood”。最後“help us remember”需要明確賓語“things”。建議：注意固定搭配（benefits of/to doing）、使用whether引導選擇，並補充必要賓語使語意完整。