整洁— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons using correct verbs and vocabulary. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. "swap the dust"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

示例: I don't usually keep things very tidy, but I do clean more often now because some of my relatives have allergies. For example, I vacuum and dust my room twice a week to reduce dust and prevent their symptoms.

建议: Answer directly and use past simple for past habits. Avoid repeating the previous answer; instead, provide a clear contrast or detail. Use specific actions and correct vocabulary (e.g. 'allergic rhinitis', 'vacuum', 'dust'). Keep it within 2–3 sentences and link ideas with words like 'because' or 'so'.

示例: When I was a child I usually kept my room tidy because my sibling had allergic rhinitis. For that reason, I would tidy my toys and vacuum regularly to keep dust to a minimum.

× Actually I'm not type of keep things tidy until I have allergic relatives, so that is why I need to swap the dust and clean my room more than before.

✓ Actually I'm not the type to keep things tidy unless I have relatives with allergies, so I need to dust and clean my room more than before.

Errors: 'not type of' should be 'not the type to' (incorrect phrase usage/adjective form). 'until I have allergic relatives' is incorrect; use 'unless I have relatives with allergies' to express the condition. 'swap the dust' is incorrect collocation; use 'dust' as a verb. Suggestions: Use the fixed expression 'the type to' for preferences, use 'relatives with allergies' to describe people who have allergies, and use 'dust' to describe removing dust. Maintain present simple for general habit.

× As I mentioned earlier, I used to keep my room tidy until I have allergic rhinitis which is have runny nose all day, so I need to swap all dust and keep everything in that place to avoid that.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I used to keep my room tidy until I developed allergic rhinitis, which caused a runny nose all day, so I needed to dust everything and keep things in their place to avoid that.

Errors: Mixing tenses — 'used to' (past habit) followed by present tense 'have' is inconsistent; use past tense 'developed' or 'had'. 'which is have runny nose all day' is ungrammatical; use 'which caused a runny nose all day' or 'which made my nose run all day'. 'swap all dust' is wrong collocation; use 'dust' or 'clean the dust'. Also keep verbs consistent in past: 'so I needed to dust' and 'keep things in their place'. Suggestions: Keep past tense after 'used to', use correct medical phrase 'allergic rhinitis' with appropriate verbs, and use 'dust' as the verb for removing dust. Use 'things in their place' instead of 'in that place' for natural phrasing.