公园— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は直接的で分かりやすいですが、文法ミスと語順の誤り、語彙の選び方に改善が必要です。トピック文を明確にしてから、理由をつなげる接続語（because, so, therefore）を使い、語形（child → a child/when I was a child、didn't like go → didn't like going）や複数形（friend → friends）を正しく直しましょう。また、冗長な表現を避け、文の数は3～4文以内に収めて自然に述べる練習をしてください。

示例: When I was a child, I didn't enjoy going to parks. Because I disliked playing sports, I preferred spending time playing video games or studying at home. As a result, I rarely went to parks with my friends.

建议: 答えは肯定しており改善の余地がありますが、時制の一貫性と文の流れを整える必要があります。現在の習慣を述べるときは現在形（I enjoy）を使い、過去の体験は過去形で分けましょう。Supporting detailsを出す場合は接続詞（for example, also）を使って関連情報をつなげ、文は3文以内に簡潔にまとめてください。

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy going to parks these days because I like playing sports and running outdoors. I also enjoy camping with my friends, which lets me relax and appreciate nature.

建议: 意図は伝わりますが、語彙と文法の選択に注意が必要です。重複（in in）を避け、名詞の数や表現（few parks → not many parks, touch more natures → be closer to nature / have more contact with nature）を自然な英語に直しましょう。理由を述べるときは接続詞（because）を入れて流れをよくし、2〜3文でまとめてください。

示例: Yes, definitely. Kobe is very urbanized and there are not many parks, so I would like to have more green spaces. Having more parks would allow people to be closer to nature and enjoy outdoor activities.

建议: 答えは具体的な場所を挙げていて良いですが、固有名詞の正確さ（Iguazu Fallsなど）と表現の自然さを改善してください。時制や冠詞（I've never thought of that → I hadn't really thought about it, but…）や形容詞の使い方（very enormous → truly spectacular / enormous）に気をつけ、理由を一文で簡潔に述べましょう。

示例: I hadn't really thought about it before, but I'd love to visit Iguazu Falls in Argentina and Brazil. I think the falls are truly spectacular and a great place to experience impressive natural scenery.

× When I was child, actually, I didn't like go to the park.

✓ When I was a child, actually, I didn't like going to the park.

The noun 'child' needs the article 'a' (singular count noun). After 'didn't like' the verb should be in the -ing form when describing a general dislike of an activity. Combine these fixes: add 'a' and change 'go' to 'going'. Suggestion: Use 'a child' for singular count nouns and use 'didn't like' + verb-ing to describe activities you disliked.

× It's because I didn't like playing some sports.

✓ It's because I didn't like playing certain sports.

'Some' is acceptable in positive contexts but 'certain' more clearly conveys 'specific types' in this context. Also native speakers often say 'playing sports' or 'playing certain sports'. Suggestion: Use 'certain sports' or simply 'sports' to sound more natural.

× I prefer playing video games or studying to playing outside with my friend.

✓ I preferred playing video games or studying to playing outside with my friends.

The student is describing childhood preferences, so past tense 'preferred' matches 'When I was a child'. Also 'friend' should be plural 'friends' if referring generally. Maintain parallel structure 'playing video games or studying' vs 'playing outside with my friends'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (past) and use plural 'friends' for general reference.

× That's why I didn't go to the.

✓ That's why I didn't go to the park.

The sentence is incomplete; the object after 'to' is missing. Adding 'the park' completes the meaning. Ensure articles are used: 'the park' refers to parks already mentioned. Suggestion: Complete the prepositional phrase by adding the noun: 'the park'.

× Currently I like playing sports or running outside and I enjoyed camp, enjoy camping with my friends.

✓ Currently I like playing sports or running outside, and I enjoy camping with my friends.

The sentence mixes present 'like' with past 'enjoyed' and an infinitive-like 'enjoy'. Keep present tense consistent: 'enjoy'. Also use parallel structure and proper punctuation. Suggestion: Keep verb tenses consistent when describing current habits; use 'enjoy' for present enjoyment.

× Yes, definitely in in my city.

✓ Yes, definitely in my city.

This contains a duplicated word 'in in'. Remove the extra 'in'. Suggestion: Proofread to catch repeated words.

× Kobe is very urbanized but there are few parks in my city so I want to touch more natures.

✓ Kobe is very urbanized, but there are few parks in my city, so I want to be closer to nature.

'natures' is incorrect; 'nature' is an uncountable noun. 'Touch more natures' is not idiomatic. Use 'be closer to nature' or 'experience more nature'. Also add commas for clarity and natural phrasing. Suggestion: Use uncountable 'nature' and idiomatic expressions like 'be closer to nature' or 'experience more nature'.

× Oh, I I've never thought of that, but I want to go Igor's waterfalls in Brazil and Argentina.

✓ Oh, I haven't really thought about that, but I want to go to Iguazu Falls in Argentina and Brazil.

Use present perfect 'haven't thought' to indicate up to now. 'I I've' is a typo; reduce to 'I have' or contraction. The place name is likely 'Iguazu Falls' or 'Iguassu Falls', and word order 'in Argentina and Brazil' is natural; include 'to' before the place. Also 'go to Iguazu Falls' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: Use present perfect for experiences up to now, fix typos, and use correct place names and preposition 'to'.

× That's because it very enormous nature in my opinion.

✓ That's because it is a very enormous natural site, in my opinion.

The original lacks the verb 'is' and misuses 'nature' and 'enormous'. 'Nature' as a noun doesn't combine directly with 'enormous' to describe a place. Use 'a very enormous natural site' or better 'because it is a very impressive natural site'. Suggestion: Include the verb 'is', use appropriate noun phrases like 'natural site' or 'natural attraction', and consider 'impressive' instead of 'enormous' for natural beauty.