视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more fluent and grammatical: answer directly with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers, correct tense and word order, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, say you enjoy photography, mention when or why, and give a brief example. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I started doing it more after I bought a new smartphone last year, because its camera is excellent. For instance, I often photograph cityscapes when the light at sunset looks especially beautiful.

建议: Provide a clear direct answer (urban or rural) first, then give specific reasons and a linking word. Correct repetition and grammar, and use precise vocabulary (e.g., countryside, landscapes). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer rural views because I love natural landscapes. For example, the countryside has mountains and wide skies, which create more peaceful and dramatic photos than busy city scenes.

建议: Answer directly and avoid irrelevant comments or interruptions. State preference, give 1–2 clear reasons with linking words, and avoid hesitations. Use precise expressions like “I prefer” and explain briefly why (familiarity, memories, accessibility).

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I have a strong emotional connection to my hometown. For instance, familiar streets and landmarks remind me of childhood memories and are easier to revisit for taking photographs.

× Yes I do, I am keen on taking photos especially when I bought new my mobile phone.

✓ Yes, I do. I am keen on taking photos, especially since I bought my new mobile phone.

The original mixes past 'bought' with the present continuous interest and misorders 'my new mobile phone'. Use 'since I bought' to link the past event to the present interest and correct word order to 'my new mobile phone'. Also add punctuation for clarity.

× I he always take photos uh different views?

✓ I always take photos of different views.

The sentence has extra 'he', wrong word order and missing preposition 'of'. Remove the extraneous pronoun, place 'always' before the verb for natural word order, and add 'of' to connect 'photos' and 'different views'.

× To be perfectly honest, I am keen on on taking photos and villages, I mean the nature, mountains, fresh skies.

✓ To be perfectly honest, I am keen on taking photos of villages; I mean nature, mountains, and clear skies.

There is a duplicated 'on on', missing preposition 'of' after 'photos', and unnatural article use with 'the nature'. Use parallel nouns without 'the' and add 'and' between items. Replace 'fresh skies' with 'clear skies' for natural collocation.

× That's why I I am with taking photos.

✓ That's why I enjoy taking photos.

The original contains a duplicated 'I' and an incorrect verb phrase 'am with taking photos'. Replace with 'enjoy taking photos' to convey the intended meaning and correct structure.

× Of course, my country, because I love every piece of my hometown, my city.

✓ Of course my country, because I love every part of my hometown and my city.

Use 'part' rather than 'piece' for abstract affection, and connect 'hometown' and 'my city' with 'and' instead of a comma for clarity. No comma needed after 'Of course' here.

× That's why I can't, umm, emit. Hey, John.

✓ That's why I can't, umm, explain. Hey, John.

The verb 'emit' is incorrect in context; 'explain' fits the intended meaning. Ensure the sentence completes logically; the filler 'umm' is acceptable in speech but keep the verb correct.