视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and add one specific example. Use a linking phrase to add detail. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I love taking photos of beautiful views because it gives me a lot of pleasure. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the river near my town and later look back at them to remember the mood and weather.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence expressing your preference, avoid repetition, and give a specific reason or brief example. Use a linking word to connect reason and preference. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer urban views to rural ones because I find city architecture and street life more interesting. For instance, I enjoy photographing old buildings and busy markets in the city since countryside scenes are familiar to me.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with a specific reason and one example. Avoid vague or awkward phrases and correct grammar. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word for clarity.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy different cultures and architectural styles. For example, when I visited Saint Petersburg I noticed how varied European façades contrast with the simpler buildings in my small town, which I find less interesting.

× Yes, moreover, I adore taking pictures of picturesque views, it always gives me pleasure and I do love rewatching pictures from the past as I'm a really nostalgic person.

✓ Yes. Moreover, I adore taking pictures of picturesque views; it always gives me pleasure, and I love rewatching pictures from the past because I am a very nostalgic person.

Run-on sentence and awkward adverb/adjective use. The original combined multiple independent clauses with comma splices and used 'do love' unnecessarily for emphasis. Use proper sentence boundaries or connectors, replace comma with semicolon, and use 'very' instead of 'really' for register consistency. Also replace contraction 'I'm' with 'I am' only if formality required; here both are acceptable. Suggestions: split clauses, use 'and' to join, avoid redundant auxiliary 'do' unless stressing.

× Frankly speaking, I would rather watch urban views more than rural ones because I'm already fed up with the villages and countryside because I most of the time I live in such areas that's why I would prefer urban ones.

✓ Frankly speaking, I would rather see urban views than rural ones because I am already fed up with villages and the countryside; most of the time I have lived in such areas, so I would prefer urban ones.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb choice 'watch' should be 'see' or 'take photos of', incorrect article use 'the villages', and tense/agreement problems. 'I most of the time I live' is ungrammatical; change to 'most of the time I have lived' or 'I mostly live'. Also combine clauses clearly using a semicolon or conjunction instead of repeating 'because' and a run-on 'that's why'. Suggestions: choose correct verbs (see/photograph), use articles appropriately, correct word order 'most of the time' and maintain consistent tense.

× To be completely honest, I am a big fan of abroad culture and architecture. Since I live in Russia and in a small town, the architecture here is not really a static aesthetically pleasant.

✓ To be completely honest, I am a big fan of foreign culture and architecture. Since I live in Russia in a small town, the architecture here is not really aesthetically pleasing.

Incorrect adjective form 'abroad culture' should be 'foreign culture'. Word order and collocation issues with 'static aesthetically pleasant' are incorrect; use the established collocation 'aesthetically pleasing'. Also simplify 'in Russia and in a small town' to 'in Russia in a small town' or 'in a small town in Russia'. Suggestions: use 'foreign' for cultures of other countries, use correct adjective pairs like 'aesthetically pleasing', and maintain natural word order.