视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Shorten and make the reply more natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and one brief example. Avoid redundant phrases (e.g., "it always gives me pleasure" and "I do love") and long compound sentences.

示例: Yes, I love photographing different views. I especially enjoy capturing picturesque landscapes because they remind me of special moments; for example, I often look back at photos from a seaside trip and it brings back the atmosphere and sounds of that day.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with one or two concise reasons using linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Remove repetitions and extraneous details about being "fed up"—use neutral phrasing.

示例: I prefer urban views to rural ones because I find city architecture and street scenes more varied and interesting. For instance, I enjoy photographing historic buildings and busy markets, which I rarely see in my everyday village life.

建议: Begin with a direct statement of preference, then give a clear, specific reason. Avoid unclear or awkward phrases (e.g., "not really a static aesthetically pleasant"). Use one concise example to illustrate what attracts you to foreign views.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy diverse cultures and distinctive architecture. For example, when I travel abroad I like photographing colorful historic facades and modern skylines that are very different from the simple buildings in my small Russian town.

× Yes, moreover, I adore taking pictures of picturesque views, it always gives me pleasure and I do love rewatching pictures from the past as I'm a really nostalgic person.

✓ Yes. Moreover, I adore taking pictures of picturesque views; it always gives me pleasure, and I love rewatching pictures from the past because I am a very nostalgic person.

This sentence contains a comma splice (two independent clauses joined by a comma) and general sentence structure issues (run-on). Also 'I do love' is unnecessary for standard written response and 'I'm a really nostalgic person' is more formal as 'I am a very nostalgic person'. Fix by separating clauses with a period or semicolon, using a conjunction for clarity, and removing unnecessary auxiliary 'do'.

× Frankly speaking, I would rather watch urban views more than rural ones because I'm already fed up with the villages and countryside because I most of the time I live in such areas that's why I would prefer urban ones.

✓ Frankly speaking, I would rather see urban views than rural ones because I am already fed up with village and countryside scenery; I live in such areas most of the time, so I prefer urban views.

Multiple issues: awkward phrasing 'watch urban views' should be 'see' or 'view', redundant 'more than' with 'rather' and repeated 'because' create run-on sentence. 'the villages and countryside' is wordy; use 'village and countryside scenery'. Word order 'because I most of the time I live' is incorrect. Combine ideas with a semicolon or split into two sentences and use 'so' for result. Maintain present tense and clarity.

× To be completely honest, I am a big fan of abroad culture and architecture.

✓ To be completely honest, I am a big fan of foreign culture and architecture.

'Abroad' is an adverb meaning 'in or to a foreign country' and cannot directly modify 'culture'. The correct adjective is 'foreign'. Use 'foreign culture' or 'culture abroad'.

× Since I live in Russia and in a small town, the architecture here is not really a static aesthetically pleasant.

✓ Since I live in Russia in a small town, the architecture here is not really aesthetically pleasing.

Problems: 'in Russia and in a small town' is better as 'in Russia in a small town' or 'in a small town in Russia'. 'Static aesthetically pleasant' is ungrammatical: 'aesthetically pleasing' is the correct adjective phrase. Remove 'static' unless intended meaning is 'unchanging', in which case rephrase to 'static and not aesthetically pleasing'.