视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify meaning, correct grammar, be concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I like taking photos), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid invented words like “photolic” and reduce repetition.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, when I visit a new city I often use my phone to capture streets, skyline and local landmarks, which helps me remember the trip and share it with friends.

建议: Give a direct preference sentence, then support with specific reasons and linkers. Fix grammar (e.g., “I prefer urban views because cities are more developed”), and avoid vague phrases like “that is a wonderful view create.”

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because cities have interesting architecture and lively streets. For instance, tall buildings, cafés and waterfront promenades provide diverse photo opportunities and a vibrant atmosphere.

建议: Provide a clear statement of preference, then give coherent, specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar and logical flow (e.g., explain whether you prefer foreign views and why). Avoid unclear comparisons and pronoun confusion.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different cultures and scenery that I cannot see at home. For example, I enjoy photographing historic streets and foreign landscapes I discovered on social media, which inspire my travel plans.

× Yes, I am a photolic person that's why I am when going to the new cities and different view views.

✓ Yes, I am a photogenic person; that's why I take pictures when I go to new cities and different places.

The student used a nonstandard adjective 'photolic' and incorrect verb forms and word order. Replace 'photolic' with 'photogenic' (correct adjective). Use simple present 'I take pictures' for habitual action and 'when I go' for the time clause. Also 'different view views' is redundant; use 'different places' or 'different views'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to connect the clauses.

× That time I taking pictures on my own mobile and it is a very wonderful experience for me.

✓ At that time I took pictures with my mobile, and it was a very wonderful experience for me.

The student used 'I taking' which is incorrect; use the past simple 'I took' to describe a specific past occasion ('that time'). Use 'with my mobile' or 'on my mobile' for the instrument. Match tense consistency: past simple 'was' for the experience. Present participle is not appropriate here.

× I prefer to use views in urban areas because urban areas very developed area.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because urban areas are very developed.

The sentence has incorrect preposition/verb forms and redundant wording. Remove 'to use' after 'prefer' when referring to 'views' (prefer + noun). Add the linking verb 'are' for the clause 'urban areas are very developed.' Avoid repeating 'area.'

× In the urban area many tall buildings I see and some beaches and cafes.

✓ In urban areas I see many tall buildings, beaches, and cafes.

The original word order is incorrect. Place the subject and verb in correct order: 'I see many tall buildings.' Use plural 'urban areas' to match context. List items with commas and include a conjunction before the last item. This corrects sentence structure and parallelism.

× That is a wonderful view create.

✓ That creates a wonderful view.

The original mixes noun and verb incorrectly. Use active verb 'creates' and correct word order: subject 'That' + verb 'creates' + object 'a wonderful view.' This fixes sentence structure and agreement.

× I prefer to view in another countries because in my countries better than you in another countries, which I saw in my in social media and my mobile phone.

✓ I prefer to see views in other countries because they look better than those in my country; I have seen them on social media and on my phone.

Multiple errors: 'view in another countries' should be 'see views in other countries' (use plural 'other countries' and correct verb). 'In my countries' should be 'in my country' (singular). Comparison needs a clear object: 'they look better than those in my country.' Use 'have seen' or 'saw' depending on context; present perfect 'have seen' fits if referring to past experiences that affect present preference. Use preposition 'on social media' and 'on my phone.' Simplify and clarify the sentence structure.