视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Focus on grammar, conciseness and clearer organization. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, avoid unnecessary words like “also” at the beginning, and keep supporting details linked and specific. Use linking words (for example, often, because) correctly and avoid confusing time phrases (e.g. “noon” vs “at sunrise/sunset”).

示例: I really enjoy photographing different views, especially landscapes and cityscapes, because photos help me remember a place and its atmosphere. For example, I often take shots at sunrise or sunset to capture golden light on nearby mountains, and then I share the best photos with friends on social media.

建议: Correct vocabulary and grammar (rural not ruler; farmers, tractors). Make a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid comparative errors—use full structures (more peaceful than cities).

示例: I prefer rural areas because they are generally cooler and quieter than cities. For example, I like photographing farmers working in the fields and tractors moving along narrow lanes, which creates a more interesting and tranquil scene than urban traffic.

建议: Clarify meaning and fix word choice (prefer views in my own country; ‘use’ is incorrect). Provide a clear reason and specific examples with correct nouns and plurals (famous mountains, Simbury? — clarify local names). Avoid vague phrases like “which I find rarely in other.”

示例: I prefer views in my own country because we have many unique natural and historical sites. For example, international visitors come to see famous mountains like Simbury and centuries-old temples such as the Golden Temple, which are difficult to find elsewhere.

× Also, I really like to taking pictures of different views, especially landscape and cityscapes, because the photos helps me to remember a place and atmosphere.

✓ Also, I really like taking pictures of different views, especially landscapes and cityscapes, because the photos help me to remember a place and its atmosphere.

The verb after 'like' should be in the base -ing form without 'to'; 'to taking' is incorrect. 'Landscape' should be plural as it refers to types of scenes: 'landscapes'. 'Photos helps' is a subject-verb agreement error (plural subject 'photos' needs plural verb 'help'). Add 'its' to clarify 'atmosphere' belongs to the place. Suggestions: remove 'to' before taking; use plural nouns where appropriate; match verb number to subject and add 'its' for clarity.

× And noon, for instance, I often try to capture golden or light over nearby mountains and then share the best shots with friends on social media.

✓ At noon, for instance, I often try to capture golden light over nearby mountains and then share the best shots with friends on social media.

'And noon' is incorrect; use the prepositional phrase 'At noon' to indicate time. 'Golden or light' is ungrammatical: the intended phrase is 'golden light'. Remove 'and' at the start of the sentence if continuing, or use 'At' to begin. The rest of the sentence uses present simple appropriately for habitual actions.

× I prefer ruler area because of their cooler and more peaceful than cities.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are cooler and more peaceful than cities.

'Ruler' is a misspelling of 'rural'. 'Area' should be plural 'areas' to match general preference. 'Because of their cooler and more peaceful than cities' mixes structures and has pronoun/verb issues: use 'they are cooler and more peaceful than cities' or 'because they are cooler and more peaceful than cities.' Use 'they' to refer to 'areas' and include the verb 'are.' Suggestion: correct spelling, pluralize, and use proper comparative clause with subject and verb.

× For example, I enjoy seeing farmer working in the farm and trailer playing in the narrow lane which make the scenery more interesting than the busy traffic of an urban area.

✓ For example, I enjoy seeing farmers working on the farm and children playing in narrow lanes, which makes the scenery more interesting than the busy traffic of an urban area.

Several issues: 'farmer' should be plural 'farmers' to match general observation; use 'working on the farm' (preposition 'on') not 'in the farm.' 'Trailer' is incorrect and likely 'children' or 'trailer' is wrong—context implies 'children' or 'people' playing; use plural 'lanes' if generalizing and 'narrow lanes.' The relative clause must agree with its antecedent: 'which makes' (singular verb) refers to the preceding singular idea (the scene), but keeping plural 'lanes' and the whole noun phrase still uses 'makes' because 'the whole situation' is singular; simplified to 'which makes the scenery...'. Ensure parallel gerunds 'working' and 'playing.' Suggestion: use correct nouns, prepositions, plural forms, and ensure verb agreement in relative clauses.

× I prefer using my own country to those in other countries because many people from different countries come over here to see famous mountain, Simbury and historical sites, for example old centuries Temple and the very famous Golden Temple which I find rarely in other.

✓ I prefer my own country to other countries because many people from different places come here to see famous mountains, such as Simbury, and historical sites, for example an ancient temple and the very famous Golden Temple, which I rarely find elsewhere.

'I prefer using my own country' is unnatural; use 'I prefer my own country.' 'To those in other countries' should be 'to other countries.' 'Many people from different countries come over here' can be simplified to 'many people from different places come here.' 'Famous mountain' should be plural 'famous mountains' or specify 'a famous mountain'; include commas and 'such as' before examples. 'Old centuries Temple' is ungrammatical; use 'an ancient temple' or 'a centuries-old temple.' 'Which I find rarely in other' is incorrect word order and missing object: use 'which I rarely find elsewhere.' Suggestion: choose natural verb collocations, fix noun plurals, use 'such as' for examples, correct adjective order to 'centuries-old' or 'ancient,' and use 'elsewhere' for 'in other'.