视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce repetition and correct small grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep the answer within 2–3 sentences. For instance, avoid repeating phrases like “I like taking pictures” and remove the extra “I” in “I naturally I am…”.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love capturing interesting scenes. For example, when I walk in my neighborhood I often stop to photograph striking architecture or colourful street scenes, which helps me practice composition and lighting.

建议: Make the response more natural by using a clear topic sentence and providing a specific detail or brief comparison. Use linking words like “because” or “while” and correct agreement (e.g., “surrounding them” or “surrounded by greenery”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are surrounded by greenery and offer peaceful, picturesque scenes. While urban areas can be interesting for architecture, rural landscapes give me more opportunities to photograph natural elements like fields, trees and rivers.

建议: Be concise and avoid vague or exaggerated claims. Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition like “scenic route and scenic views.” If you mention others visiting, justify briefly. Use linking words such as “because” and “for example.”

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I haven’t traveled abroad yet and I enjoy the diverse landscapes at home. For example, our coastal roads and mountain trails offer dramatic views that I often photograph, so I would recommend visiting for anyone who likes nature.

× I naturally I am a camera obsessed person so I love to take pictures of everything that I see.

✓ I am naturally a camera-obsessed person, so I love to take pictures of everything I see.

The sentence has an extra 'I' causing redundancy and a pronoun/word order issue. Also 'camera obsessed' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective before a noun. Remove the repeated 'I', move 'naturally' to follow 'am' for natural word order, hyphenate 'camera-obsessed', and omit the unnecessary 'that' after 'everything' for conciseness.

× I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas have a lot of greenery surrounding it.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas have a lot of greenery surrounding them.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'rural areas' which is plural, so the plural pronoun 'them' is required for correct agreement. Use 'them' to match the plural noun.

× There are lots of scenic views that I can take pictures of.

✓ There are lots of scenic views that I can take pictures of.

The sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Note: the structure ending with a preposition is acceptable in informal spoken English; for formal writing you could say 'of which I can take pictures', but this is not necessary here.

× Actually, I haven't been to any other country than my own.

✓ Actually, I haven't been to any country other than my own.

The original is understandable but slightly awkward. Use 'any country other than my own' for natural word order. 'Been' is the correct past participle of 'be' for present perfect ('haven't been'). The correction improves clarity and idiomatic phrasing.

× So right now I prefer views in my own country as it has such a scenic route and scenic views.

✓ So right now I prefer views in my own country because it has many scenic routes and beautiful views.

The original uses 'as' which is acceptable but 'because' is clearer in spoken explanations. 'It has such a scenic route' mixes singular 'route' with general meaning; use plural 'routes' and avoid repeating 'scenic views' by using 'beautiful views' for variety. This corrects word choice and improves sentence flow.

× I think everybody should visit my country.

✓ I think everyone should visit my country.

'Everybody' is acceptable, but 'everyone' is slightly more natural here; no major grammar error. This is a stylistic suggestion to improve naturalness: both are correct pronouns referring to all people.