视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Use linking words (for example, when, because) to make your answer coherent. Keep it under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me share moments on Instagram. For example, I often take pictures of sunsets or city skylines when I feel they look particularly striking, and I edit them lightly before posting.

建议: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and one example. Correct grammar errors (e.g., 'born and brought up', 'rural areas are') and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example.'

示例: I prefer rural views because I was born and brought up in a city and find the countryside refreshing. For example, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and quiet villages because they feel peaceful and offer unique compositions.

建议: Answer directly and give specific reasons. Fix unclear phrases and grammar (e.g., 'I visit the place regularly', 'it's new to me'). Add an example of a foreign view you'd like to photograph to make your answer concrete. Keep sentences brief and connected by linking words like 'because' or 'so.'

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new scenery and cultural variety. For instance, I would love to photograph the colorful markets in Morocco or the historic streets of Lisbon because they look very different from places at home.

× Yes, I would love to take pictures different picture from different views to just post on my Instagram pics and I'm not a photographic kind of person.

✓ Yes, I would love to take pictures from different views just to post on my Instagram, even though I'm not a photographic person.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced words ('pictures different picture') and awkward structure. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Correction removes repetition, puts modifiers in correct order ('take pictures from different views') and connects contrasting ideas with 'even though'. Suggestion: simplify phrases, avoid repeating nouns, and place purpose phrases ('just to post on my Instagram') next to the verb they modify.

× So I would love I would I would take picture when there's any views mesmerized to me.

✓ So I would love to take pictures when a view mesmerizes me.

The original uses awkward repetition and incorrect verb form 'mesmerized to me'. This is a present participle/verb form issue (ID 10). Correction uses simple present 'mesmerizes' to agree with singular 'a view' and plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: remove repeated auxiliaries, use active verb forms ('mesmerizes me') and match singular/plural subjects and verbs.

× And yes, I'll take it.

✓ And yes, I'll take it.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. No change needed. It matches future intention with contraction 'I'll'. Including it as confirmation.

× I prefer Roelias instead of urban areas as you know that I have been and bought up, born and brought up in urban area and city kind of places.

✓ I prefer rural areas instead of urban areas, as I was born and brought up in cities.

The original has multiple preposition and word choice errors ('Roelias', 'been and bought up') — this is an incorrect use of prepositions and word forms (ID 11). Correction fixes 'Roelias' to 'rural areas', replaces awkward phrasing with 'born and brought up in cities'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('born and brought up in') and standard nouns ('cities', 'rural areas').

× So the rural is will be new to me.

✓ So the rural areas would be new to me.

Original mixes articles and modal verbs incorrectly ('is will be') — a sentence structure error (ID 26). Correction uses 'would be' to indicate hypothetical preference and plural 'rural areas'. Suggestion: choose one tense/modal and match number.

× So that's the rural areas will be more refreshing and it's kind of breathtaking picture, breathtaking places.

✓ So rural areas would be more refreshing, and they can be breathtaking places to photograph.

Original misuses adjectives and repeats 'breathtaking picture, breathtaking places' awkwardly — this is an adjective/adverb use error (ID 13). Correction turns description into a clear clause and matches plural subjects. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same adjective and ensure adjectives modify the correct noun.

× So I would take the picture, I would prefer taking into the areas.

✓ So I would take pictures; I would prefer taking them in rural areas.

Original sentence has incorrect preposition 'into' and unclear object — a sentence structure error (ID 26). Correction clarifies object 'pictures' and uses correct preposition 'in' for locations. Suggestion: use 'in' for being in a place and ensure pronouns ('them') clearly refer to 'pictures'.

× I prefer views in other countries because as I mentioned before, I've been modern part of here so I visit the place they regularly and I sit every day.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because, as I mentioned before, I've seen the modern parts of this place many times, so I visit those places regularly and go there often.

Original uses incorrect pronouns and nonsensical phrases ('they regularly', 'I sit every day') — an incorrect pronoun use error (ID 12). Correction replaces unclear pronouns with 'those places' and fixes verbs to convey repeated visits. Suggestion: use clear antecedents for pronouns and choose verbs that match the intended meaning ('visit', 'go').

× So I would like to prefer view from other countries which it'll be new to me and I would also.

✓ So I would prefer views from other countries because they would be new to me.

Original sentence fragments ('and I would also') and incorrect relative clause ('which it'll be new to me') make this a sentence structure error (ID 26). Correction produces a complete sentence with correct relative pronoun and modal. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments, complete the thought, and match 'views' (plural) with 'they would'.