视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and use natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (use gerunds/infinitives and plural/singular forms) and avoid repetition.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me remember places I’ve visited. For example, I often photograph landmarks and landscapes so I can share them with friends and recall details of the trip later.

建议: Begin with a direct statement of preference, then give two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (plural forms, articles) and remove filler phrases. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer rural areas to cities because I dislike crowds and noise. Also, I love nature, and in the countryside you can enjoy wide open landscapes and clear views without visual clutter.

建议: Answer the question directly (state preference), then explain with specific comparisons and reasons. Improve grammar (past tense consistency, correct nouns), and be more precise about what impressed you. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however'.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer landscapes different from my own. For instance, when I visited the UK last month I was struck by the wide, open fields and green scenery, which felt very different from my small, densely populated home country.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of views because it can remember where I visit and you can remind me of the place and also I can tell somebody, someone else where I was going and.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of views because they can help me remember where I have visited, remind me of places, and let me show others where I have been.

The original sentence misuses 'it' to refer to 'pictures' (plural) and uses 'remember' without an appropriate subject; also mixes tenses ('where I visit' and 'where I was going') causing inconsistency. Use plural pronoun 'they' for 'pictures', use 'help me remember' and the present perfect 'have visited' / 'have been' to indicate past visits with present relevance. Remove redundant phrases and clarify parallel structure by listing actions with consistent verb forms.

× I prefer rural area more because I don't like crowding, noisy city and I love nature and in the rural area the the view the scenery are in full view. So explain you can.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I don't like crowded, noisy cities; I love nature, and in rural areas the scenery is fully visible.

Errors include singular/plural mismatch ('rural area' should be 'rural areas' and 'city' -> 'cities'), incorrect adjective form ('crowding' -> 'crowded'), repeated word ('the the'), and incorrect verb agreement ('the scenery are' -> 'the scenery is'). Also 'in full view' is awkward; 'fully visible' is clearer. The final fragment 'So explain you can' is unclear and likely extraneous; it was omitted to keep the sentence grammatical and relevant.

× Last month I went to the UK and the view there makes me feel totally different and I love the scenery there because the white filed and because my country is very small and we don't have very wide scenery.

✓ Last month I went to the UK; the views there made me feel completely different, and I loved the scenery, especially the white fields, because my country is very small and we don't have wide open landscapes.

Tense inconsistency: 'went' is past, so following verbs describing impressions of that trip should also be past ('made', 'loved'). 'Makes me feel' should be 'made me feel'. Spelling error 'filed' -> 'fields'. 'Very wide scenery' is unnatural; 'wide open landscapes' or 'vast scenery' is better. Adjusted adjectives and nouns for natural collocation and parallel structure.