视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Use linking words if adding more info. Pronouns and verb forms should be accurate (e.g., "I often take selfies" not "I often taking").

示例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy taking selfies to show my daily outfits and makeup. For example, I usually take a few quick photos each morning and sometimes record short videos to capture my full look.

建议: Give a direct, grammatical topic sentence, then add specific reasons with correct linking words. Avoid filler and repetition. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "vibe" not "vibes is"; "I prefer" not "I preferred"). Clarify unclear phrases like "pipes"—probably you meant "parks" or "architecture."

示例: I prefer urban areas because I like the elegant architecture and the calm atmosphere. For instance, city parks and tree-lined streets feel peaceful, and the buildings provide interesting backgrounds for photos.

建议: Answer directly and use correct sentence structure. State the preference, then give clear, specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague or grammatically incorrect phrases like "the government is not put the layout so well"—say "urban planning is poor." Provide a concrete example and finish the sentence fully.

示例: To be honest, I prefer views in other countries because my hometown is quite crowded and poorly planned. For example, Singapore has clean, well-organized public spaces and attractive streets, which I find much more pleasant to visit.

× Yes I do especially selfie.

✓ Yes, I do, especially selfies.

The noun 'selfie' should be plural ('selfies') because the speaker implies they take them regularly. Also add commas for clarity. Improve by using plural for habitual actions and punctuating pauses properly.

× I often take selfie to to show my outfit and my makeup daily and I often taking shorter video to record my whole body outfit.

✓ I often take selfies to show my outfit and my makeup daily, and I often take short videos to record my whole outfit.

Use base verb 'take' not 'taking' after 'often'; use plural 'selfies' and 'videos'; 'shorter video' should be 'short videos' to match plural context; 'whole body outfit' is unnatural – 'whole outfit' is clearer. Remove duplicate 'to'.

× As I can see I I preferred in urban areas because it's more elegant and the vibes is more quiet and peace.

✓ As I can see, I prefer urban areas because they are more elegant and the vibes are quieter and more peaceful.

Use present simple 'prefer' not past 'preferred' to state current preference. 'Urban areas' plural requires 'they are'. 'Vibes' plural takes 'are', and comparative forms: 'quieter' and 'more peaceful'. Add commas and fix doubled 'I'.

× I just love that pipes in your urban areas.

✓ I just love the parks in urban areas.

Original 'pipes' and 'your urban areas' seem incorrect. Likely intended 'parks' and general 'urban areas' (not 'your'). Use definite article 'the' for specific type and correct noun. If speaker meant something else, choose correct noun and neutral reference.

× Well to be honest is other countries, it is because my country is kind of crowded and the government is not put the layout so well and I kind of jealous with other countries.

✓ Well, to be honest, other countries, because my country is kind of crowded, and the government has not planned the layout very well, and I am kind of jealous of other countries.

Insert missing subject 'other countries' contextually; use present perfect 'has not planned' to describe current state resulting from past action; use 'jealous of' not 'jealous with'; include 'am' for 'I am'. Add commas for clarity.

× For example in Singapore they have a clean areas in every.

✓ For example, in Singapore they have clean areas everywhere.

Remove unnecessary article 'a' before 'clean areas' when plural; use 'everywhere' rather than 'in every' to complete the thought; add comma after introductory phrase.