视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and complete your final sentence. Focus on verb tense and noun forms (e.g., 'pictures', 'since', 'have always dreamed').

示例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I have wanted to be a photographer since I was a child because I enjoy sharing beautiful scenes with my siblings and I admire nature’s colours and patterns. For example, I often photograph sunsets and rice fields to capture the peaceful atmosphere.

建议: Answer directly with a clear preference sentence, then give specific reasons and one concrete example. Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'grew up', 'rural areas', 'rice fields'). Use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I grew up in a rural province of Cambodia and I find the countryside more peaceful. For example, my home is surrounded by green rice fields and quiet lanes, which I find more relaxing than busy city streets.

建议: Be clear about your preference and give a reasoned explanation. Use correct phrasing ('since', 'my country', 'I prefer') and avoid vague phrases like 'some stuff'. Provide one specific example of a place and explain what you like about its views. Keep responses to no more than 4–5 sentences.

示例: I prefer seeing views in other countries because I enjoy experiencing different landscapes and cultures. For instance, I have visited Mondulkiri in Cambodia, which has wide green hills, but I also like travelling abroad to see coastal scenery and new city skylines that I cannot find at home.

× Yes, I really like taking picture of different views because I was like I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views because I have liked it since I was a kid.

Error type: present tense and singular/plural. 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures'. The original mixes past and present awkwardly; use present perfect 'have liked' to show a preference starting in the past and continuing to the present. This matches the question's present-tense context. Suggestion: use 'have liked' or 'have enjoyed' for ongoing past-to-present actions and pluralize countable nouns as needed.

× I I had always been dreaming of to become a photographer because the way that I really share interested with my sibling and the way that really, really admire about the nature and surrounding views that also the awesome thing that's happening around us.

✓ I have always dreamed of becoming a photographer because I have shared an interest in it with my sibling and I really admire nature and the surrounding views; they are wonderful.

Errors: incorrect use of past continuous/perfect progressive 'had always been dreaming of to become' and incorrect verb forms. Use present perfect 'have always dreamed' for a dream that began in the past and continues. 'of to become' is wrong; use 'of becoming'. 'share interested' is incorrect collocation and verb form; use 'shared an interest in'. 'admire about' is incorrect; use 'admire' + direct object. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns after 'dream of' (verb-ing) and correct collocations like 'share an interest in' and 'admire nature'.

× So I really like the.

✓ So I really like it.

The original ends abruptly 'I really like the' which is incomplete and lacks an object. Use 'it' to refer back to taking pictures or views. Suggestion: always include a clear object after verbs like 'like' or complete the clause.

× Well, I had grown up in the rural areas that located in the component provinces, which is really far away from the city.

✓ Well, I grew up in a rural area located in the Kompong provinces, which is really far away from the city.

Use simple past 'grew up' for a past event rather than past perfect 'had grown up' which requires a later reference point. 'rural areas that located' is ungrammatical; use 'a rural area located in'. Also fix proper noun spelling if intended. Suggestion: use simple past to describe past life events unless you are relating two past events.

× It is in Cambodia.

✓ It is in Cambodia.

This sentence is correct. No change needed. (No grammar problem from the provided list.)

× I think that the rural area has a really more romanticizing vibe as they're in my houses.

✓ I think that the rural area has a more romantic vibe, like the one around my house.

Errors: 'a really more romanticizing vibe' is awkward; use 'a more romantic vibe' or 'a really romantic vibe'. 'Romanticizing' is the wrong form. 'as they're in my houses' is unclear and incorrect pronoun/reference; use 'like the one around my house'. Suggestion: choose correct adjective forms and clear comparative structure.

× At my houses there's a lot of like rice filled, green rice filled.

✓ Around my house there are many green rice fields.

Errors: 'At my houses' should be 'Around my house' or 'Near my house'. 'there's' with plural 'rice fields' is subject-verb disagreement; use 'there are'. 'a lot of like rice filled, green rice filled' mixes forms; correct phrase is 'many green rice fields' or 'a lot of green rice fields'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use correct noun phrases for fields.

× Sin I mean, in my countries I had to explore lots of many places already like Mondo Curry that had a lot of like green lands, fields and also the landscape with lots of nature and environment and views and some stuff like that.

✓ I mean, in my country I have already explored many places, like Mondulkiri, which has a lot of green land, fields and beautiful natural landscapes and views.

Errors: 'Sin' is unclear; likely 'So' or 'I mean'. 'my countries' should be singular 'my country' unless plural intended. 'I had to explore' is wrong tense and meaning; use present perfect 'have explored' to express experience to date. 'lots of many' is redundant; use 'many' or 'a lot of'. 'Mondo Curry' likely misnamed; use correct place name if known. 'green lands' better as 'green land' or 'green areas'. Suggestion: use 'have explored' for experiences, avoid redundancy, and correct noun phrases.

× So I had preferred to immersing myself in a different environment in different countries, experiencing different views and seeing many different things and all.

✓ So I prefer immersing myself in different environments in other countries, experiencing different views and seeing many new things.

Errors: 'I had preferred to immersing' mixes past perfect and incorrect verb form. Use simple present 'prefer' to state a general preference. After 'prefer' use verb-ing: 'prefer immersing'. Use plural 'environments' and 'other countries' for clarity. Remove vague ending 'and all'. Suggestion: use present tense for general preferences and correct verb patterns (prefer + -ing).