视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문장이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류와 불필요한 말(예: “Who teachers? Abuse.”)이 포함되어 있습니다. 질문에 직접 답하는 주제 문장이 필요하며, 여행 이유와 사진을 찍는 구체적인 동기를 간단히 덧붙여야 합니다. 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어가고, 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지하세요. 예: 주제문 → 이유(구체적인 예) → 간단한 결론(선호 표현).

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos when I travel because different places often have unique colours and architecture that inspire me. For example, I like capturing sunsets and street scenes to remember the atmosphere.

建议: 답변은 선호를 명확히 밝히고 이유를 제시하려 한 점은 좋지만 발음 중간의 방해음(uh, um)과 문법 오류(‘close’, ‘clear sighted’, ‘lower building’)가 이해를 어렵게 합니다. 보다 정확한 표현과 연결어를 사용해 이유를 구체화하세요(예: 자연, 공기, 전망). 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 유지하고 불필요한 중복은 제거하세요.

示例: I prefer rural areas because they have more trees and open spaces, which make the views clearer. Also, the low-rise buildings in the countryside let you see mountains and skies more easily, so I find it more relaxing.

建议: 의견을 비교하려는 의도는 보이나 문장 구조와 어휘 선택이 부정확해 의미 전달이 어렵습니다(예: 'Turning outside', 'really tied', 'there are three'). 비교 문장은 명확한 주제 문장과 이유, 구체적인 예를 포함해야 합니다. 연결어(However, Also)를 정확히 사용하고, 각 선택에 대한 구체적 특징을 제시하세요.

示例: I like views in my own country because it has many traditional buildings and mountain landscapes that feel familiar and peaceful. However, I also enjoy views abroad because they offer different architecture and cultures, which are exciting to explore.

× Actually I am because I like to travel around the around so some places are always motivating me.

✓ Actually I do, because I like to travel around, and some places always inspire me.

The original sentence has a missing main verb for the question 'Do you like...?' and repetition 'around the around'. Use 'do' as a short answer (auxiliary verb) for 'Do you like...?' and connect ideas with 'and'. Replace 'motivating me' with 'inspire me' for natural collocation. Suggested revision: use 'I do' for short answers, avoid repeated words, and use appropriate verbs like 'inspire'.

× Who teachers? Abuse.

✓ (This fragment is unclear and seems unrelated; if you meant 'Who teaches? I don't understand.', write: 'Who teaches? I don't understand.' )

The fragment 'Who teachers? Abuse.' is ungrammatical and semantically incoherent. 'Teachers' is a noun; as a verb it should be 'teaches' with a subject. 'Abuse' is out of context. Clarify intention: if asking 'Who teaches?' use correct verb form 'teaches' with a subject. If expressing confusion, add a full clause like 'I don't understand.'

× I prefer the rural areas close UH there are lots of trees and clear sighted because they are lower building.

✓ I prefer rural areas because there are lots of trees and clear views since the buildings are low.

'The rural areas close' is awkward; use 'rural areas'. 'Clear sighted' is incorrect; use 'clear views'. 'Lower building' is incorrect adjective order and form; use 'low buildings' or 'the buildings are low'. Use conjunctions ('because', 'since') to link reasons. Improve fluency by removing filler 'UH' and ordering adjectives correctly.

× Uh. There are environments.

✓ There is a pleasant environment.

'There are environments' is odd and countability is unclear. Use 'There is an environment' or better 'There is a pleasant environment' or 'The environment is pleasant.' Choose singular/plural correctly and add an adjective to make meaning clear.

× Turning outside really tied my my country's view because there are a lot of traditional building and a lot of mountains.

✓ Looking abroad made me appreciate my country's scenery because there are a lot of traditional buildings and many mountains.

'Turning outside' is unnatural; use 'Looking abroad' or 'Going abroad'. 'Tied my my country's view' is ungrammatical and duplicated. 'A lot of traditional building' needs plural 'buildings'. Use 'appreciate my country's scenery' for clarity and correct pluralization.

× But I also like the views abroad because there are three.

✓ But I also like views abroad because they are different.

'There are three' is unclear and grammatically incorrect here. Likely the speaker meant 'they are different' or 'there are many'. Replace vague numeric 'three' with a clear descriptor. Ensure the pronoun 'they' agrees with 'views'.