视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use precise vocabulary. Use one or two supporting details with linking words. Also correct countable/uncountable nouns and tense phrases.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing landscapes because it lets me capture beautiful moments. For example, when I take photos of a sunset, I can look back later and remember the colors and the mood, which makes those memories feel vivid.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence (state preference). Use correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and fewer fillers. Give one or two specific reasons with linking words for coherence.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because they bring me closer to nature and help me relax after a long day. For instance, walking among fields and trees calms me, whereas crowded streets and tall buildings feel stressful.

建议: Start with a direct answer (own country or others) and avoid vague or fragmented sentences. Fix grammatical errors and provide a clear reason with a concrete example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like 'however' or 'also'.

示例: I like the landscapes in my own country because Vietnam has many beautiful places, but I would also love to see views in other countries. For example, studying abroad would let me experience different scenery and cultures, which would broaden my horizons.

× Taking pictures of different landscape is really interesting because we can record or we can capture the very breathtaking moments in the present.

✓ Taking pictures of different landscapes is really interesting because we can record or capture the very breathtaking moments in the present.

The noun 'landscape' should be plural ('landscapes') because 'different' implies more than one. Use plural to agree with 'different'. Also 'we can record or we can capture' is wordy; 'or' with repeated 'we can' is acceptable but tightening to 'record or capture' is more natural.

× And then when we look back on the future, we can feel the memories, we can feel the emotion at that moment.

✓ And then when we look back in the future, we can feel the memories; we can feel the emotions of that moment.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'look back in the future' or better 'in the future look back on the past'. Also 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match 'memories' and 'that moment' is better expressed as 'of that moment'. Minor punctuation improved for clarity.

× I'm into rural areas, views and landscape rather than urban areas because it's helped me closer to the nature and wide down after a hard working day and more than that I'm not prefer very crowded or umm too much higher buildings.

✓ I'm into rural views and landscapes rather than urban areas because they help me feel closer to nature and calm down after a hard-working day; also, I don't prefer very crowded places or very tall buildings.

Several pronoun and agreement problems: 'views and landscape' should be 'views and landscapes'. 'It's helped me closer to the nature' is incorrect: use plural subject 'they' to refer to 'views and landscapes' and verb 'help' without 'it' and 'feel closer to nature' (drop 'the'). 'Wide down' is wrong; correct phrase is 'calm down'. 'I'm not prefer' is ungrammatical; use 'I don't prefer'. 'Too much higher buildings' should be 'very tall buildings'.

× To be honest, Vietnam had many, many beautiful plant cafe.

✓ To be honest, Vietnam has many, many beautiful plant cafes.

Tense and article/number issues: 'had' suggests past—use present 'has' if speaking generally. 'plant cafe' should be plural 'plant cafes' to match 'many'. No article needed before 'Vietnam' when used as subject.

× But uh, if I have a chance to study abroad or working abroad, I want to have one more chance to emerge in the breathtaking landscapes and all the country out of my country, which help me can brighten my horizon and.

✓ But if I have a chance to study or work abroad, I would like another chance to immerse myself in the breathtaking landscapes of other countries, which would help broaden my horizons.

Multiple structure errors: parallelism needed in 'study or work abroad' (not 'study abroad or working abroad'). 'Have one more chance to emerge' is incorrect; 'immerse myself' is appropriate. 'All the country out of my country' is ungrammatical; use 'other countries'. Relative clause should use correct modal and verb order: 'which would help broaden my horizons.' Remove trailing 'and' and fix modal consistency.