视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid hesitations and repetitions. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words. Reduce filler sounds (uh, um) and correct small grammar issues (e.g., ‘share with my friends and family on Instagram’).

示例: Yes, I do. I often take landscape photos and share them on Instagram because I enjoy preserving memories. However, I usually take only a few shots so I can relax and enjoy the scenery rather than spend too much time photographing.

建议: Provide a clear direct answer first, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., ‘I prefer rural areas to urban ones’) and avoid vague or repeated words. Use precise vocabulary like ‘mountains, rivers, fresh air, and sunsets.’

示例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones. Firstly, I enjoy natural landscapes such as mountains and rivers, which feel peaceful. Secondly, the fresh air and beautiful sunsets help me relax, so I go to the countryside when I want to unwind.

建议: Answer directly and expand with specific comparisons or examples. Fix grammar (e.g., ‘each place has its unique scenery’) and use linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘however’ to make your point clearer.

示例: I like views both in my country and abroad. For example, my country has familiar landscapes and cultural sites, but foreign countries often offer different architectural styles and natural wonders, so I appreciate both when I have the chance.

× Yes, of course, like others, I I like taking photos of different views and share with my friends and families on, on special photo Instagram, on social media.

✓ Yes, of course. Like others, I like taking photos of different views and sharing them with my friends and family on Instagram and other social media.

The sentence has pronoun and verb form issues: 'I I' duplicates the subject (typo). 'share' should be 'sharing' to match the verb 'like' + gerund structure. Use 'them' to refer back to 'photos' (correct pronoun). 'families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's family as a group. Remove redundant words ('special photo Instagram') and clean prepositions for clarity.

× But I don't spend too much time on uh, taking photos instead of uh, uh, enjoy nature and uh, relax on.

✓ But I don't spend too much time taking photos; instead, I enjoy nature and relax.

After 'spend time' the verb should be in the -ing form ('taking photos') — this is correct in the original, but 'instead of' followed by 'enjoy' is incorrect because 'instead of' requires a noun or -ing form ('enjoying') or rephrase. It's clearer to use 'instead' and a full clause: 'instead, I enjoy...' Remove filler sounds and the final preposition 'on' which is unnecessary.

× I love nature beauties that's why I prefer rural air other than urban areas because I watching mountains, rivers and uh, fresh fresh air, Suns, uh, sunset on uh, uh, rural area mores.

✓ I love the beauty of nature, so I prefer rural areas rather than urban ones because I can see mountains and rivers and enjoy the fresh air, the sun, and sunsets more in rural areas.

Problems include incorrect noun forms ('nature beauties' -> 'the beauty of nature'), wrong noun 'rural air' -> 'rural areas', missing verb form 'I watching' -> 'I can see', repetition 'fresh fresh' removed. 'Suns' is incorrect; use 'the sun'. 'mores' should be 'more'. Also connect clauses with appropriate conjunctions ('so', 'because') and use articles ('the') where needed.

× That's why I prefer rural areas to relax and enjoy the sensory. MMM.

✓ That's why I prefer rural areas to relax and enjoy the scenery.

The word 'sensory' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'scenery' when referring to views. Remove hesitation sounds. No comparative structure is needed here; correct word choice fixes the error.

× I prefer both my own country and foreign countries views because each pair each place have their unique sensory and I love watching them if I get opportunities.

✓ I prefer views both in my own country and in foreign countries because each place has its own unique scenery, and I would love to see them if I get the opportunity.

Errors: 'both my own country and foreign countries views' needs repositioning ('views both in...'). 'each pair each place' is incorrect and redundant; use 'each place'. Subject-verb agreement: 'each place have' -> 'each place has' (each = singular). 'unique sensory' should be 'unique scenery'. 'I love watching them if I get opportunities' should be conditional and idiomatic: 'I would love to see them if I get the opportunity.' Use singular 'opportunity' or 'opportunities' with consistent article.