视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify your main idea and use simple, correct sentences. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures, then give one or two specific reasons with concrete details and linking words. Avoid unrelated or unclear words and focus on coherence and grammar (e.g., correct verb forms and articles).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like landscapes because they remind me of special moments and places I visited. For example, I took photos of a mountain sunset last year, which helps me remember the trip. Overall, photography helps me capture memories and emotions.

建议: State your preference directly then give clear reasons and one specific example. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas, and correct noun/verb forms (e.g., 'urban areas', 'developments'). Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because I like the modern architecture and lively atmosphere. For instance, I enjoy walking past tall office buildings and new parks in the city, which show how the area is developing. However, I also appreciate rural scenery for its peacefulness.

建议: Give a direct answer (own country or other countries) and support it with specific, relevant examples. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect vocabulary (e.g., 'my computer', 'Utrecht' used incorrectly). Use linking words like 'for example' properly and keep sentences grammatically correct.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing landmarks and different cultures. For example, I loved visiting the Taj Mahal in India and walking around its gardens, which was very memorable. Traveling abroad lets me compare architecture and landscapes I can’t find at home.

× Yes, I love to taking pictures of God very huge because because he would say everything to remember that the Brahmin I was not there.

✓ Yes, I love taking very large pictures of God because he said everything to remember that the Brahmin was not there.

The phrase 'love to taking' mixes infinitive and gerund forms; use either 'love to take' or 'love taking'. Also 'very huge' is incorrect collocation; use 'very large' or 'huge'. Tense and subject agreement needed: 'he would say' ambiguous, changed to past 'he said' to match 'was not there'. Suggestion: choose either 'love to take' or 'love taking' and use appropriate adjective collocations and consistent past tense.

× This is a resistance by taking pictures.

✓ This is a way of resisting by taking pictures.

Original sentence has unclear structure and missing preposition. 'Resistance by taking pictures' needs a clearer noun phrase: 'a way of resisting by taking pictures'. Use 'way of' to show purpose and correct preposition 'by' placement.

× So it is in 200 languages.

✓ So it is in many languages.

'in 200 languages' is likely incorrect or unlikely; the quantifier 'many' fits general statement. If specific number intended, ensure accuracy. Use 'many languages' for generalization.

× In my perfect view both areas are good and beautiful, but apart from this I generally prefer to properties in urbanism because there are many developments and a big building so producing by government or any other private company that's looking.

✓ In my view, both areas are good and beautiful, but generally I prefer properties in urban areas because there are many developments and large buildings produced by the government or private companies.

Errors: 'perfect view' should be 'view'; missing comma after introductory phrase. 'apart from this' is unnecessary. 'prefer to properties' wrong preposition; use 'prefer properties' or 'prefer to live in properties'. 'urbanism' should be 'urban areas'. 'a big building so producing' is ungrammatical; use 'large buildings produced'. 'that's looking' unclear; 'private companies' suffices. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use correct prepositions and noun forms.

× As compared to as compared to alternatives, my computer is so due to world and there are many plays that is so wonderful and fantastic.

✓ Compared to other places, my country has many sights that are wonderful and fantastic.

Original repeats 'as compared to' and uses 'computer' incorrectly; likely intended 'country'. 'so due to world' is meaningless. 'plays that is' has subject-verb agreement error; changed to 'sights that are'. Suggestion: use 'compared to other places' and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× It's everywhere.

✓ They are everywhere.

Context refers to 'sights' or 'places' (plural), so pronoun should be plural 'they'. If referring to 'country' then 'it's everywhere' is odd. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees with noun reference.

× A number of Utrecht will compared to rejected places, for example from a business, Taj Mahal, Agra, etcetera.

✓ A number of places, for example the Taj Mahal in Agra, are often compared and highly regarded.

Original is garbled: 'Utrecht' (a city) seems misplaced. 'will compared to rejected places' is ungrammatical. Use 'the Taj Mahal in Agra' with definite article. Ensure correct verb form and clear noun phrases. Suggestion: name examples clearly and use appropriate articles and verbs.