视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Good response: clear topic sentence and personal opinion. To improve, reduce filler words (e.g., “exactly”), avoid redundancy, and add one specific supporting detail (what you photograph or a brief example) using a linking word. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. Whenever I visit a new place, I usually photograph the landscape, especially dramatic light at sunrise or interesting city skylines. For example, last month I captured a mountain sunrise that expressed how peaceful I felt.

建议: Answer addresses both choices but has grammatical errors and hesitations. Improve by using correct grammar (e.g., “both of them”), avoid fillers (uh), and use a linking phrase to compare. Add a specific example to support preference.

示例: I prefer both of them for different reasons. In cities I enjoy photographing modern buildings and historic monuments, whereas in rural areas I focus on natural scenes like wildflowers and deer. For instance, I once photographed an old cathedral and a nearby meadow in the same trip.

建议: Content is honest but wordy and contains fillers and repetition. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence, then give concise reason and one specific example or expectation. Replace vague phrase “actually the same” with a clearer explanation.

示例: I haven't traveled widely, so I haven't seen many foreign views. However, I would prefer views in other countries because they offer different architecture and cultural landscapes. For example, I would like to photograph traditional markets abroad to see colors and scenes I don't have at home.

× I think I prefer both of it.

✓ I think I prefer both of them.

The pronoun 'it' refers to a singular noun, but 'both' refers to two things (urban areas and rural areas), so a plural pronoun 'them' is required. Use 'both of them' when referring to two items mentioned earlier.

× In urban areas I would like to see the views of modern buildings and, uh, artifacts, but in rural areas I prefer views of natural scenes such as plants or animals.

✓ In urban areas I would like to see the views of modern buildings and artifacts, but in rural areas I prefer views of natural scenes such as plants and animals.

The comma before 'artifacts' is unnecessary and interrupts the flow; removing the filler 'uh' and extra comma makes the sentence grammatically cleaner. This correction addresses punctuation and clarity rather than a major grammar category, but fits under article/punctuation errors in spoken language.

× We have to be honest, I haven't gone to a lot of countries, so I just know little about views in other countries.

✓ To be honest, I haven't been to many countries, so I know little about views in other countries.

Use the common phrase 'To be honest' instead of 'We have to be honest' in this personal statement. 'Haven't been to' is the correct expression for visiting countries; 'gone to' can be used but 'been to' is more natural here. Also use 'many' with countable plural 'countries' rather than 'a lot of' in this context, and remove the unnecessary 'just' for clarity.

× But if I have a chance, I would prefer views of other countries since I've already seen a lot of views in our country and they look, uh, actually the same.

✓ But if I have the chance, I would prefer views in other countries since I've already seen many views in our country and they actually look the same.

Use 'the chance' as the usual collocation. 'Views in other countries' is more natural than 'of other countries.' Replace 'a lot of views' with 'many views' for countable nouns. Remove the filler 'uh' and place 'actually' before 'look' for natural adverb placement. The tense 'I've already seen' (present perfect) is appropriate here to express experience up to now.