视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, avoid hesitations, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use more natural phrasing (e.g., “taking photos of views relaxes me and helps me reflect”).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they relax me and help me reflect. For example, a river or sunrise calms my mind and often gives me new ideas for my artwork.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give a clear reason and a brief supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., “because” or “so”). Avoid repeating similar ideas.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I like quieter, greener landscapes. For instance, the countryside offers open fields and fresh air, which help me relax more than busy city streets.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and add one specific example or comparison to support your reason. Use linking words such as “because” and “for example” to make your answer coherent.

示例: I generally prefer views in my own country because it has a lot of natural beauty. For example, our coastal cliffs and forests are home to many bird species, so I feel more connected to familiar landscapes than to foreign ones.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views as such pictures. Uh. Make me feel refreshed and it allows me to join the thoughts of my mind.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, as such pictures make me feel refreshed and allow me to gather my thoughts.

The original has incorrect sentence structure and verb forms. 'Make me feel' and 'it allows me to join the thoughts of my mind' are fragmented and inconsistent. Combine clauses and use parallel verb forms: 'make' and 'allow' as simple present verbs matching the plural noun phrase 'such pictures'. Replace 'join the thoughts of my mind' with the natural expression 'gather my thoughts'. Use a comma to connect the clauses. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel and use common expressions for clarity.

× I prefer looking at the various views in my city or in my village, but when talking about my preference, I always choose the rural background to view.

✓ I prefer looking at various views in my city or village, but when it comes to my preference, I always choose rural backgrounds.

The original is wordy and contains awkward phrases like 'in my city or in my village' and 'when talking about my preference'. Use simple present tense consistently: 'prefer' and 'choose'. Make nouns plural for general meaning ('views', 'backgrounds'). Replace 'when talking about my preference' with the idiomatic 'when it comes to my preference'. Remove unnecessary articles for natural English. Suggestion: simplify phrasing and keep verb tense consistent.

× Generally, I prefer views in my own country because I believe that my country is full of natural beauty and natural habitats.

✓ Generally, I prefer views in my own country because I believe my country is full of natural beauty and natural habitats.

The sentence is mostly correct but slightly redundant with 'that' and 'in' usage. Removing 'that' and keeping 'in my own country' as is improves flow. No major preposition error, but simplification makes it more natural. Suggestion: omit unnecessary words ('that') for clearer present-tense statements.

× The various species of biodiversity are also available in it.

✓ Various species of biodiversity are also found there.

Using 'available in it' is unnatural when referring to a country. Replace 'in it' with 'there', and use 'found' instead of 'available' for organisms' presence. 'Various species of biodiversity' is wordy; 'various species' suffices. Suggestion: use 'there' to refer back to 'my country' and prefer 'found' for presence of species.