视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and clear with a topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use complete sentences with linking words to add one specific supporting detail. Also choose appropriate vocabulary (e.g., “photogenic” describes people, use “good eye” or “have an eye for composition” for photography).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I have an eye for composition. For example, I like photographing beaches and gardens because their colors and textures create aesthetically pleasing images.

建议: Give a clear preference in a topic sentence, avoid hesitations and irrelevant remarks, and support your opinion with one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “also”).

示例: I prefer urban views to rural ones because cities offer a variety of architectural styles and lively street scenes. For example, I enjoy capturing modern skyscrapers and colorful markets which provide interesting contrasts and dynamic compositions.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add a specific supporting detail or example and use correct tense and linking words. Avoid vague expressions like “so much good.”

示例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling allows me to photograph unfamiliar landscapes and cultures. For instance, when I visited Italy I took many photos of historic streets and coastal scenery, which felt more inspiring than what I usually see at home.

× Yes, because people tell me a lot that I have photogenic and I also I'm also great at taking photos like beaches.

✓ Yes, because people often tell me that I'm photogenic, and I'm also great at taking photos of places like beaches.

The adjective 'photogenic' needs to describe the speaker using 'I'm photogenic' rather than 'I have photogenic'. 'A lot' as a frequency is better as 'often'. Remove the duplicated 'I also' and use 'photos of places like beaches' instead of 'photos like beaches' to show photos of those subjects. Suggestions: replace 'I have photogenic' with 'I'm photogenic', use 'often' for frequency, remove duplicate words, and add 'of' before the objects of photography.

× Gardens.

✓ I also like photographing gardens.

A single word 'Gardens.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and clear relation to the previous clause. Combine it into a full sentence with a verb: 'I also like photographing gardens.' Suggestions: avoid fragments; ensure each sentence has a subject and verb.

× For me, I prefer orbits orbit areas to rural areas.

✓ For me, I prefer urban areas to rural areas.

'Orbits orbit areas' is incorrect; likely intended 'urban areas'. Use 'prefer X to Y' construction correctly. No extra preposition needed. Suggestions: use correct word 'urban' and keep the 'prefer X to Y' format.

× Why? Because why not? People have preferences and I feel there is no reason to explain why I prefer this, but rather than that.

✓ Why? Because why not? People have preferences, and I feel there is no reason to explain why I prefer this.

The phrase 'but rather than that' is unnecessary and ungrammatical here. Remove the redundant clause to make the sentence clear. Also add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. Suggestions: eliminate redundant phrases and keep sentences concise.

× I love other views in other countries.

✓ I love the views in other countries.

Repeating 'other' is redundant. Use 'the views in other countries' to refer generally to views found abroad. Suggestions: avoid repetition and choose definite article 'the' when speaking generally about a known category.

× I remember the time when I take pictures whenever I'm traveling.

✓ I remember the time when I took pictures whenever I was traveling.

The verb tense must be consistent: 'remember' refers to a past event, so the subordinate verbs should be in the past ('took', 'was traveling'). Using present tense 'take' and 'I'm traveling' is inconsistent. Suggestions: use past tense in past recollections: 'took pictures' and 'was traveling'.

× I feel so much good about it.

✓ I feel so good about it.

'So much good' is nonstandard; use 'so good' or 'very good'. 'So much' is used with nouns (so much joy) not with adjectives. Suggestions: replace 'so much good' with 'so good' or 'very good'.